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Some people are of the view that only university education can ensure success, whereas many others oppose the view. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Some people are of the view that only university education can ensure success, whereas many others oppose the view. VxlQ
It is true that higher studies and a university degree can remarkably contribute to one's success. But there is another group of people who believe that higher education can only provide you a degree but experience matters the most. Many career aspirants live under a dilemma and in the process, remain indecisive. This essay tries to weigh both the perspectives and to come up with a concrete opinion. Let’s first understand why some students want to seek a job early. They are various reasons behind this. There are several young people who have plans to start a business of their own and for that, they want to gain experience. As a result, they join a job. There also are other type of students who, though want to pursue high studies but cannot because they come from a weak financial background and so, have a pressing need for job.
It is true that higher studies and a university degree can
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contribute to one's success.
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there is another group of
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people
who believe that higher education can
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only
provide you a degree
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but
experience matters the most.
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career aspirants
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live
under a dilemma and in the process, remain indecisive. This essay tries to weigh both the perspectives and to
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come
up with a concrete opinion.

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some
students want to seek a job early. They are various reasons behind this. There are several young
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people
who have plans to
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start
a business of their
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own
and for that, they want to gain experience.
As a result
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join
a job. There
also
are other type of students who, though want to pursue high studies
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but
cannot
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because
they
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come
from a weak financial background and
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so
, have a pressing need for job.
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IELTS essay Some people are of the view that only university education can ensure success, whereas many others oppose the view.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
148 words
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