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some people are of the view that industries and multinational companies and no the government should pay for the coast of ways to clean up the pollution they have created discuss both views and give your own opinion..

some people are of the view that industries and multinational companies and no the government should pay for the coast of ways to clean up the pollution they have created . gLVD
The problem of pollution which was always debatable issue has now become more controversial with many folks claiming that this issue is developed by firms and international organisations, so they should pay fund to mitigate this obstacle. however the rest go adverse it and hold a view that it is a responsibility of higher authorities to abolish this meanace. The following paragraphs would shed light on both views and this will lead to a logical conclusion. On the one hand, there are plenty of reasons why government need to pay for claiming wastage and dust particles. The first and foremost, industries already equip money through taxes. These firms and MNC's have to pay some amount of fund in order to contribute their role towards society. To illustrate, one of my relative has one industry and he pay thousands dollars every month for cleaning the air pollution. Secondly, it is the duty of government to clean the environment as they have a huge budget. If government allocate adequate aid towards this hurdle, it would definitely mitigate. Hence, it is apparent that why some people are in the favour of this view. On the other hand, international companies and the firms are developing polluted environment day by day. The most pivotal aspect, there is a huge burden of manifold services on government, such as, education, road facilities, and healthcare. Thus, if these organisations pay fund for cleaning dust particles, it would reduce that strain of government. Adding to the fact, since a industry emits obnoxious gases in the air, folks has faced health ailments. So, it's the moral obligation of them to curb this menace. Along with this, these advances on huge profit by selling these MNC's earn huge profits by selling their products, and if these forms pay for the cost of ways to clean up the polluted environment, it would improve the society. In my opinion, I would say, both should take step forward in order to come curb this obstacle as by doing this it would improve easily. In conclusion, although toxins substances are being produced by Industries, it does not mean administration should not involve in this process. However, both should take responsibility to reduce the contimination.
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now
become more controversial with
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many
folks claiming that this issue
is developed
by firms and international
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organisations
,
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so
they should
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pay
fund to mitigate this obstacle.
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however
the rest go adverse it and hold a view that it is a responsibility of higher authorities to abolish this
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meanace
. The following paragraphs would shed light on both views and this will lead to a logical conclusion.

On the one hand, there are
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plenty
of reasons why
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government
need to
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pay
for claiming wastage and dust particles. The
first
and foremost,
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industries
already equip money through taxes. These firms and
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MNC
's
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have to
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pay
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some
amount of fund in order to contribute their role towards society. To illustrate, one of my relative has one
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industry and
he
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pay
thousands dollars every month for cleaning the air pollution.
Secondly
, it is the duty of
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government
to clean the environment as they have a
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huge
budget. If
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government
allocate adequate aid towards this hurdle, it would definitely mitigate.
Hence
, it is apparent that why
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some
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people
are in the
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favour
of this view.

On the other hand
, international
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companies
and the firms are developing polluted environment day by day. The most pivotal aspect, there is a
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huge
burden of manifold services on
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government
, such as, education, road facilities, and healthcare.
Thus
, if these
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organisations
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pay
fund for cleaning dust particles, it would
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reduce
that strain of
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government
. Adding to the fact, since
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a
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industry
emits obnoxious gases in the air, folks has faced health ailments.
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So
, it's the moral obligation of them to curb this menace. Along with this, these advances on
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huge
profit by selling these
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MNC
's earn
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huge
profits by selling their products, and if these forms
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pay
for the cost of ways to clean up the polluted environment, it would
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improve
the society.

In my opinion, I would say, both should take step forward in order to
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come
curb this obstacle as by doing this it would
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improve
easily
.

In conclusion
, although toxins substances are
being produced
by
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Industries
, it does not mean administration should not involve in this process.
However
, both should take responsibility to
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reduce
the
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contimination
.
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IELTS essay some people are of the view that industries and multinational companies and no the government should pay for the coast of ways to clean up the pollution they have created .

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