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Some people are for the death penalty to punish murderers or criminals that have committed extremely serious crimes, while others are against it. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Some people are for the death penalty to punish murderers or criminals that have committed extremely serious crimes, while others are against it. nVNle
There are a few common ways to punish criminals. While the capital punishment seems to be a right punishment to decline crimes; nevertheless, it is my firm conviction that are more effective methods instead. To begin with, death penalty can send a clear message that crime is morally wrong and criminals who commit a crime will be put to death to protect our society. Moreover, provided that people see the hazard of being implicated in a crime, the rate of violent crimes can be reduced and even prevented. Also, government providing criminals with all basic human needs spends its finance, whereas budget should be spent on medicine, education, economic and politic developments of the country. To be more clearly, if there were a death penalty for grave crimes, it would be a cost-effective punishment and a cheaper alternative to life-long prison, which, in turn, can eliminates the possibility of criminals re-offending. However, innocent people wrongly convicted might be killed which is equivalent to murdering. Furthermore, although the court of justice justly condemns a defendant to the majority of time, there are numerous situations when people didn’t commit the crime; however, they were tricked. Another viewpoint is that criminals can be used as blue-color workers or as donors in medicine researches. In other words, while myriad people worldwide die due to suffering from various disease related to different body organs, the government can use criminals as donors and as a consequence save obedient citizens. Also, their efforts might be used at the dangerous employment such as in excavations, minis and so forth. To conclude, while some say that a capital punishment is needed, I strongly believe that alternative solutions are more practical.
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criminals
. While the capital
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punishment
seems to be a right
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punishment
to decline
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crimes
;
nevertheless
, it is my firm conviction that are more effective methods
instead
.

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begin
with, death penalty can
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send
a
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clear
message that
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crime
is
morally
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wrong
and
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criminals
who commit a
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crime
will
be put
to death to protect our society.
Moreover
, provided that
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people
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see
the hazard of
being implicated
in a
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crime
, the rate of violent
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crimes
can be
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reduced
and even
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prevented
.
Also
,
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government
providing
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criminals
with all basic human needs spends its finance, whereas budget should
be spent
on medicine, education, economic and politic developments of the country. To be more
clearly
, if there were a death penalty for grave
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crimes
, it would be a cost-effective
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punishment
and a cheaper alternative to life-long prison, which, in turn, can
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eliminates
the possibility of
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criminals
re-offending.

However
, innocent
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people
wrongly
convicted might
be killed
which is equivalent to murdering.
Furthermore
, although the court of justice
justly
condemns a defendant to the majority of time, there are numerous situations when
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people
didn’t commit the
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crime
;
however
, they
were tricked
. Another viewpoint is that
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criminals
can be
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used
as blue-color workers or as donors in medicine researches.
In other words
, while myriad
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people
worldwide
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die
due to suffering from various disease related to
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different
body organs, the
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government
can
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use
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criminals
as donors and as a consequence save obedient citizens.
Also
, their efforts might be
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used
at the
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dangerous
employment such as in excavations, minis and
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so
forth.

To conclude
, while
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some
say that a capital
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punishment
is needed
, I
strongly
believe that alternative solutions are more practical.
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IELTS essay Some people are for the death penalty to punish murderers or criminals that have committed extremely serious crimes, while others are against it.

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