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young people travel or work between high school and university

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Nowadays, among the end of high school and starting university time period gap most countries recommend to their pupils for use to tours or jobs. However, there are both pros and cons to this point. In this essay, I discuss the advantages of better subject selection and independent confidence. On other hand, I talk about the disadvantages of addiction and there is a number of risk they do not come back for study. Let's begin by looking at the benefits. One of the main positives they can develop their self-determination. When they travel possible to increase self-confidence as well as assist to improve their inter-personality skills. The scholar can not go travelling due to the fact they have not money to spend. In this situation, they can choose a job. It helps to them grow up own knowledge and earn income. In other words, those people can gain experience about society. Another main benefit is its support to them select to better subjects in university education. When they're doing the job they can understand what kind of career match for them and also they can find out their talent. It definitely supports to uni study. Working with various age groups and industry junior can get to experience which industries have a demand in the job market and which are low spaces. Turning to the other side of the argument, Addiction is a major problem. Lot of people who come to the society, they are new to deal with a various community. They have not idea what kind of people living in their circle. All of them immature. So, easy to impact bad habits for them. The second drawback is they give up university study. During this time period, they expose varieties of culture and fashion. They build up a bond with a new circle. They lose the quality of pupil life and discipline. Its barrier to recovering again as a scholar. In other words, they focus on their career and earn money within one year. After that go back again like a pupil, it may be uncomfortable for these youngsters. All thing considered, young graduate travel and work between this time period they can gain benefits for their future education and there are we can discover a number of drawbacks help to stop their university learning.
Nowadays, among the
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end
of high school and starting
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university
time period gap most countries recommend to their pupils for
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use
to tours or
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jobs
.
However
, there are both pros and cons to this point. In this essay, I discuss the advantages of better subject selection and independent confidence. On
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other
hand, I talk about the disadvantages of addiction and there is a number of
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risk
they do not
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come
back for study.
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Let
's
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begin
by looking at the benefits. One of the main positives they can develop their self-determination. When they travel possible to increase self-confidence
as well
as assist to
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improve
their inter-personality
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skills
. The scholar can not go travelling due to the fact they have not money to spend. In this situation, they can choose a
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job
. It
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helps
to them grow up
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own
knowledge and earn income. In
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other
words, those
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people
can gain experience about society. Another main benefit is its support to them select to better subjects in
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university
education. When they're doing the
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job
they can understand what kind of career match for them and
also
they can find out their talent. It definitely supports to uni study. Working with various age groups and industry junior can
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get
to experience which industries have a demand in the
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job
market and which are low spaces.

Turning to the
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other
side of the argument, Addiction is a major problem. Lot of
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people
who
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come
to the society, they are new to deal with a various community. They have not
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idea
what kind of
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people
living in their circle. All of them immature.
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So
, easy to impact
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bad
habits for them. The second drawback is they give up
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university
study. During this time period, they expose varieties of culture and fashion. They build up a bond with a new circle. They lose the quality of pupil life and discipline. Its barrier to recovering again as a scholar. In
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other
words, they focus on their career and earn money within one year. After that go back again like a pupil, it may be uncomfortable for these youngsters.

All thing considered, young graduate travel and work between this time period they can gain benefits for their future education and there are we can discover a number of drawbacks
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help
to
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their
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learning.
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IELTS essay young people travel or work between high school and university

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
386 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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