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some people advertisement should be banned but some thing it is important for companies

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In today's world, we are surrounded by advertisements, we can see them on television, in the streets and shops, on websites, and even on our mobile screens. Unfortunately, there is no way to avoid it and somehow we all are forced to watch them. Adverts can cause distraction, for instance, you may receive an SMS while you are working or during a tutorial video on YouTube, you have to watch advertisements. Not only does it distract but also it leads people to consume. To be more clear, advertising creates false needs which are not necessary and will encourage people to spend money on inessential products, for instance, young people especially girls by watching advertisements about new clothing styles or make-up products, … which they do not really need it. In addition, most of the youngsters cannot afford it as they are too young to have money themselves, so they rather ask for money from their parents to buy those objects or feel despair because they could not have what they desire to. Despite the fact advertisements have helped companies to grow faster and introduce their new products, I believe adverts need to be limited and there should be some particular spaces for that. At the same time, some advertisements should be completely banned like the ones which are about sex or alcohol or cigarette as long as there is not any safe solution to prevent children not to see them. In conclusion, advertisements in many points damage society and in my point of view there is no point in having them in today's world.
In
today
's world, we
are surrounded
by
advertisements
, we can
see
them on television, in the streets and shops, on websites, and even on our mobile screens.

Unfortunately, there is no way to avoid it and somehow we all
are forced
to
watch
them. Adverts can cause distraction,
for instance
, you may receive an SMS while you are working or during a tutorial video on YouTube, you
have to
watch
advertisements
. Not
only
does it distract
but
also
it leads
people
to consume.

To be more
clear
, advertising creates false needs which are not necessary and will encourage
people
to spend money on inessential products,
for instance
, young
people
especially
girls by watching
advertisements
about new clothing styles or
make
-up products, … which they do not
really
need it.

In addition
, most of the youngsters cannot afford it as they are too young to have money themselves,
so
they
rather
ask for
money from their parents to
buy
those objects or feel despair
because
they could not have what they desire to.

Despite the fact
advertisements
have
helped
companies
to grow faster and introduce their new products, I believe adverts need to
be limited
and there should be
some
particular spaces for that. At the same time,
some
advertisements
should be completely banned like the ones which are about sex or alcohol or cigarette as long as there is not any safe solution to
prevent
children not to
see
them.

In conclusion
,
advertisements
in
many
points damage society and in my point of view there is no point in having them in
today
's world.
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IELTS essay some people advertisement should be banned but some thing it is important for companies

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
264 words
6.5
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