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Some parents hold the view that extra homework after school can be beneficial to their children. I totally agree with opinion, although children may feel stressful if they shoulder heavy study load.

Some parents hold the view that extra homework after school can be beneficial to their children. I totally agree with opinion, although children may feel stressful if they shoulder heavy study load. 0AlbG

Some parents hold the view that extra homework after school can be beneficial to their children. I totally agree with the opinion, though children may feel stressful if they shoulder the heavy workload. Students are required to do some academic-relevant activities as they can have a better understanding of the subjects. It is common that students forget important formulas and theories. Some extracurricular activities, such as reviewing their class notes, reading loudly and doing practice questions can help school attenders to strengthen their memories of key points. It also enables children to know where their weakness are after they find their mistakes in homework and correct them. In this way, they will get a substantial improvement in exam grades and outperform their peers in the study. On the other hand, students may be under high physical and psychological pressure by doing these educational activities. Children usually stay at school and learn various subjects eight hours a day, such as math, chemistry and literature, which can make them feel tired. If they are requested to finish more assignments or academic reading when they go back home, they may be deprived of adequate sleep. Students who lack of sleep may not concentrate on lectures, and their academic performance can be affected if they cannot absorb the knowledge in class. This may cause depression among students. In my opinion, these additional activities can make our children more competitive and prepare them in the job market. We live in a world full of challenges and fierce competition. It is almost impossible for the young to find a good job without a well-recognized degree and strong ability. Unless a child is a genius, he or she must study hard and do homework to achieve better academic results. A child can then go to a prestigious university as a result of high academic achievements and find better job opportunities in the future.

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