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Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages?

Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages? BGp6
In this modern world, it is commonly believed that the location such as museums or art galleries should furnish not cost entrance fees while others argue that to impose entry charges. This essay will discuss about good and poor impact on levy of admission charges in museums and will recommend how its benefits outweigh their detriments. First and foremost, there are numerous advantages of charging entry fees on museum and art galleries. Firstly, in both of the institute, a plenty countable staffs are required to care for the place and they need to benefit sufficient salary. The amount received by people through arrival can be contributed to the welfare of the employees. Secondly, the cost of maintenance of these venues are extremely soaring. The monuments places in art galleries and museum needs to be checked on regular basis and if any damage occurs, cost of the same can be utilized from the revenue received from the entry fees. To illustrate, recently a statue in museum of Japan got damaged by earthquake and the cost incurred on redevelopment was withdraw from the fees. In contradiction, apart from its quality impact there are many negative results in charging admission fees. One of the disadvantages is that there will be increase in crime rate. Due to the free entry in museums and other places, there are high prospect that things such as sculpture and other historic objects can be stolen. For instance, recently an art gallery in Mumbai due to the non-demand of entrance charges things such as old paintings were robbed and there were no people to look after it. In conclusion, museums and art galleries includes many precious materials and imposing an entrance fees has many pros such as employment opportunities, preservation charges can easily outweigh its cons which are experiencing any criminal act and other factors.
In this modern world, it is
commonly
believed that the location such as
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museums
or
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art
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galleries
should furnish not
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cost
entrance
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fees
while others argue that to impose
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entry
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charges
. This essay will discuss about
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good
and poor impact on levy of admission
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charges
in
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museums
and will recommend how its benefits outweigh their detriments.

First
and foremost, there are numerous advantages of charging
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entry
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fees
on
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museum
and
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art
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galleries
.
Firstly
, in both of the institute, a
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plenty
countable
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staffs
are required
to care for the
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place and
they need to benefit sufficient salary. The amount received by
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people
through arrival can
be contributed
to the welfare of the employees.
Secondly
, the
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cost
of maintenance of these venues are
extremely
soaring. The monuments
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places
in
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art
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galleries
and
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museum
needs to be
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checked
on regular basis and if any damage occurs,
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cost
of the same can
be utilized
from the revenue received from the
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entry
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fees
. To illustrate, recently a statue in
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museum
of Japan
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got
damaged by earthquake and the
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cost
incurred on redevelopment was
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withdraw
from the fees.

In contradiction, apart from its quality impact there are
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many
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negative
results in charging admission
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fees
. One of the disadvantages is that there will be increase in crime rate. Due to the free
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entry
in
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museums
and
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other
places, there are high prospect that things such as sculpture and
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other
historic objects can
be stolen
.
For instance
, recently an
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art
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gallery
in Mumbai due to the non-demand of entrance
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charges
things such as
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old
paintings
were robbed
and there were no
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people
to look after it.

In conclusion
,
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museums
and
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art
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galleries
includes
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many
precious materials and imposing an entrance
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fees
has
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many
pros such as employment opportunities, preservation
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charges
can
easily
outweigh its cons which are experiencing any criminal act and
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other
factors.
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IELTS essay Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
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