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Some employers reward members of staff for their exceptional contribution to the company by giving them extra money. This practice can act as an incentive for some but may also have a negative impact on others. To what extent is this style of management effective? Are there better ways of encouraging employees to work hard?

It is observed that giving rewards is always the good way to motivate employees' contribution. Nevertheless, this notion seems to bring the negative impact on others who are not this situation. In this essay I will explain giving rewards of management is highly effective and there are still other ways to motivate employees to work productively and efficiently. On the one hand, money bonus can be a great source of information. First of all, bonus improves job satisfaction which also serves as an effective way to keep crucial staff member in the organization. Secondly, this money can be valuable things that helping them to improve their life. Therefore, giving money as an incentive could encourage the citizens to work more hardly. For instance, Apple company give their workers 1000$ as a gift, if they finish the task within a time limit. In result, the company's revenue surged by 20% and productivity of employees also reached a peak. Moreover, such a practice should motivate the wors to work hard, who did not benefited by the scheme. On the other hand, other parametres to encourage workers fpr better productivity can not br ignored. Mental supports are considered to bring more positive effects for employees rather than former. Recieving a congratulation whenever doing a good job is the best recompense towards the staff. It sounds very simply, however, it would be real value. Furthermore, companies should provide other benefits such as free travelling, free accommodation and health insurance. For instance, if the companies encourage their employees in this effectively way, they would achieve productivity in their work place. In conclusion, it is logical that employees should appreciated by their employers, giving rewards is the best way encourage them. Nevertheless, some people would ignore this situation. Despite of giving money, there are other benefits such as mental support and free travelling would be right choice to improve job satisfaction.
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is observed
that
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giving
rewards is always the
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good
way to motivate employees' contribution.
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negative
impact on others who are not this situation. In this essay I will
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explain
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giving
rewards of management is
highly
effective and there are
still
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other
ways to motivate
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employees
to
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work
productively
and
efficiently
. On the one hand,
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money
bonus can be a great source of information.
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First of all
, bonus
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improves
job satisfaction which
also
serves as an effective way to
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keep
crucial staff member in the organization.
Secondly
, this
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money
can be valuable things that helping them to
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improve
their life.
Therefore
,
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giving
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money
as an incentive could
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encourage
the citizens to
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work
more
The adverb ‘hardly’ is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
hardly
.
For instance
, Apple
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company
give their workers
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: “$1000”.
1000$
as a gift, if they finish the task within a time limit. In result, the
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company
's revenue surged by 20% and productivity of
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employees
also
reached a peak.
Moreover
, such a practice should motivate the
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wors
to
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work
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hard
, who did not
The base form of the verb “benefit” is expected after “do”.
benefited
by the scheme. On the
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other
hand,
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other
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parametres
to
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encourage
workers
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fpr
better productivity can not
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ignored
. Mental supports
are considered
to bring more
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positive
effects for
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employees
rather
than former.
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Recieving
a congratulation whenever doing a
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good
job is the best recompense towards the staff. It sounds
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very
simply
,
however
, it would be real value.
Furthermore
,
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companies
should provide
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other
benefits such as free travelling, free accommodation and health insurance.
For instance
, if the
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companies
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encourage
their
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employees
in this
effectively
way, they would achieve productivity in their
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work
place.
In conclusion
, it is logical that
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employees
should
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appreciated
by their employers,
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giving
rewards is the best way
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encourage
them.
Nevertheless
,
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some
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people
would
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ignore
this situation.
Did you mean “Despite” (or, alternatively, ‘in spite of’)?
Despite of
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giving
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money
, there are
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other
benefits such as mental support and free travelling would be right choice to
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improve
job satisfaction.
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IELTS essay Some employers reward members of staff for their exceptional contribution to the company by giving them extra money. This practice can act as an incentive for some but may also have a negative impact on others. Are there better ways of encouraging employees to work hard?

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  American English
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