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Some educationalists think that international exchange visits benefits teenagers at the school. To what extent do advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Education is considered as passport to success and every country dream that their youth must have better education. Recently, international exchange visits have been introduced into the education system. As like me, many are considering it as a good initiative, but opponents have distinct viewpoint. In an essay I will throw light on both perspectives. The defender of the stance that going for overseas visits during high school studies will bring numerous merits for the society believe that it is good castling. The significant reason behind this notion is that pupils learn many those skills which they do not learn in their own country. For example, in my home country India, every material of study is provided by the teacher, and student puts less effort to brief study material from a long chapter, and this may build laziness with them and they might not develop highly recommended skills of research. Despite the fact, in many developed nations this progression is not followed, and this makes pupils more active learner. However, every coin has two sides and the same is true here. The far most important drawback of these visits is that teenage period is the most critical period of one’s life, which required close monitoring of parents. Hence, if students will not be monitored by their parents, they might involve in anti-social activities, and this may destroy their future. Further, these contrary consequences may affect parents negatively. Another pivotal aspect is, orientation of international exchange visits may cause extra burden of poor parents as many times they cannot afford international trips, which can deteriorate their family relation, especially with their offspring’s. To conclude, it cannot be denied that these international travels while studies have far reaching negative impacts, but these are uncommon. Rather than continuing the disadvantages of this, it will be more beneficial to count the advantages as these can be gained by plentiful pupils.
Education
is considered
as passport to success and every country dream that their youth
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must
have better education. Recently,
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international
exchange
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visits
have
been introduced
into the education system. As like me,
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many
are considering it as a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
initiative,
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but
opponents have distinct viewpoint. In an essay I will throw light on both perspectives.

The defender of the stance that going for overseas
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visits
during high school
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studies
will bring numerous merits for the society believe that it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
castling. The significant reason behind this notion is that pupils learn
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
those
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
which they do not learn in their
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own
country.
For example
, in my home country India, every material of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
is provided
by the teacher, and student puts less effort to brief
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
material from a long chapter, and this may build laziness with
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them and
they might not develop
highly
recommended
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
of research. Despite the fact, in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
developed nations this progression is not followed, and this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
pupils more active learner.

However
, every coin has two sides and the same is true here. The far most
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important
drawback of these
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visits
is that teenage period is the most critical period of one’s life, which required close monitoring of
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parents
.
Hence
, if students will not
be monitored
by their
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parents
, they might involve in anti-social activities, and this may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
destroy
their future.
Further
, these contrary consequences may affect
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parents
negatively
. Another pivotal aspect is, orientation of
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international
exchange
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visits
may cause extra burden of poor
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parents
as
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many
times they cannot afford
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international
trips, which can deteriorate their family relation,
especially
with their offspring’s.

To conclude
, it cannot
be denied
that these
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international
travels while
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studies
have
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far reaching
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negative
impacts,
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but
these are uncommon.
Rather
than continuing the disadvantages of this, it will be more beneficial to count the advantages as these can
be gained
by plentiful pupils.
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IELTS essay Some educationalists think that international exchange visits benefits teenagers at the school.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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