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Some educationalists think that international exchange visit will benefit teenagers at the school. TO WHAT EXTENT DO THE ADVANTAGES OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGES?

Some educationalists think that international exchange visit will benefit teenagers at the school. GkJ2
At present international exchange programs are gaining popularity in different countries. Although some people believe that such visits are beneficial for school students, others are concerned about negative effects of exchange program. This essay intends to discuss both sides of exchange visit, and conclude whether benefits outweigh drawbacks. On the one hand, teenagers will be able to know about different culture and Language through an exchange program. This learning will broaden the horizon of their knowledge. For example, if the exchange happens between USA and Bangladesh, students of both countries will get first-hand experience about other countries. This knowledge will help them in their future endievours. On the other hand, students who visit to other countries may find difficulty in adjustment because of language barear and cultural differences. Due to this problem, a student may feel less confident, and in future the student may loss the courage to face the world. Moreover, school level teenagers are too young to visit another country through exchange program. Since they are not adult enough, they should not be left freely. There is also chance of spoiling as students may come into contact with bad company. Therefore, it is unwise to let young children go other country through exchange program, In fact, I this program is suitable for university level students. To conclude, international exchange visits are certainly a good way to gain practical knowledge of other country. For school students, it is not a right program as there have some negative impacts on them. Therefore, it is evident that disadvantages of international exchange visits outweigh the advantages.
At present international
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believe that such
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visits
are beneficial for school
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students
, others
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about
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negative
effects of
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exchange
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. This essay intends to discuss both sides of
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exchange
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visit
, and conclude whether benefits outweigh drawbacks.

On the one hand,
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teenagers
will be able to know about
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different
culture and Language through an
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exchange
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program
. This learning will broaden the horizon of their knowledge.
For example
, if the
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exchange
happens
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between USA
and Bangladesh,
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students
of both
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countries
will
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get
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countries
. This knowledge will
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endievours
.

On the
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hand,
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students
who
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to
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may find difficulty in adjustment
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because
of language
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barear
and cultural differences. Due to this problem, a
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student
may feel less confident, and in future the
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student
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loss
the courage to face the world.
Moreover
, school level
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teenagers
are too young to
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another
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through
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. Since they are not adult
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, they should not be
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left
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also
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students
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young children go
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other
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program
, In fact, I this
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is suitable for university level students.

To conclude
, international
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exchange
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visits
are
certainly
a
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good
way to gain practical knowledge of
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other
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country
. For school
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students
, it is not a right
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program
as there have
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some
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negative
impacts on them.
Therefore
, it is evident that disadvantages of international
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exchange
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visits
outweigh the advantages.
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IELTS essay Some educationalists think that international exchange visit will benefit teenagers at the school.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.0
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