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Some believe that entertainers are paid too much and their impact on society is negative, while others disagree and believe that they deserve the money they make because of their positive effect on others. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Due to constant media attention, sports professionals have become stars and celebrities and have paid hefty amount. However, i also agree that it is fully justified. Firstly, sports salaries are not determined by considering the vital services they are providing to the society rather it is the reflection of popularity of the sport in general and public support that successful stars can generate. foreg, Sachin Tendulkar is known to be an image of God in cricket world and he earned so much name and fame because of the popularity of his game and people loves watching him. On the contrary, any player who is not popular yet doesnot seems to earn more as number of professionals with real talent are very few and money is just a recognisation of that talent and amount of hardwork they put to become successful. for eg, Lionel Messi of barcelona football team is known to be the biggest footballer of his generation and he has got the real talent same with R. Nadal top tennis player. secondly, competition is constant and each player has to perform to his very best in relatively short career and in that short span of time they might have gone through various surgries and other accidents just to prove their capability and worth. thirdly, the pressure from media is so constant and intense that they have very little privacy out of spotlight. most of their time is being spent on touring and playing that they hardly get some gala time to spent with their families and friends. So all these above stated factors justify huge salaries and indicates society also places more value of sports.
Due to constant media attention,
sports
professionals have become stars and celebrities and have paid hefty amount.
However
,
i
also
agree
that it is
fully
justified.

Firstly
,
sports
salaries are not determined by considering the vital services they are providing to the society
rather
it is the reflection of popularity of the
sport
in general
and public support that successful stars can generate.
foreg
,
Sachin
Tendulkar
is known
to be an image of God in cricket
world and
he earned
so
much name and fame
because
of the popularity of his game and
people
loves
watching him.
On the contrary
, any player who is not popular
yet
doesnot
seems to earn more
as
number of professionals with real talent are
very
few and money is
just
a
recognisation
of that talent and amount of
hardwork
they put to become successful.
for
eg
, Lionel Messi of
barcelona
football team
is known
to be the biggest footballer of his
generation and
he has
got
the real talent same with R.
Nadal
top tennis player.

secondly
, competition is constant and each player
has to
perform to his
very
best in
relatively
short career and in that short span of time they might have gone through various
surgries
and other accidents
just
to prove their capability and worth.

thirdly
, the pressure from media is
so
constant and intense that they have
very
little
privacy out of spotlight.
most
of their time is
being spent
on touring and playing that they hardly
get
some
gala time to spent with their families and friends.

So
all these above stated factors justify huge salaries and indicates society
also
places more value of
sports
.
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IELTS essay Some believe that entertainers are paid too much and their impact on society is negative, while others disagree and believe that they deserve the money they make because of their positive effect on others.

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