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Some believe that economic progress is the major requirement for any country whereas others say that various other developments are needed more than it. How far do you agree?

Some believe that economic progress is the major requirement for any country whereas others say that various other developments are needed more than it. How far do you agree? Gww2e
Despite high Gross Domestic Product and per capita income in many countries, the present scenario is grim as every social and national challenge is competing with each other to become a matter of grave concern for the entire world. I believe though economic growth is the major requirement for any country yet not sufficient to make the countries more livable. Apparently, the economic progress of a country enables it to develop its infrastructure, subsidize education and health services for their denizens and gear up transportation network. These facilities enhance human development index of their natives which further improves their efficiency and thus basic living standards. Also, it is state funding that supports research and development and maintenance of art and culture which thereby promotes tourism. Although industrialization contributes in economic growth yet it must be ensured that it does not lead to deforestation in the eco-sensitive areas and thus leading to ecological imbalance. Also, though the United States has the highest GDP, it being the third major polluter in the world has alarming levels of carbon emissions which affect human health. Economic progress, however, does not denote equal distribution of wealth rather at times leads to concentration of wealth in a few hands which is responsible for widening of gap between the rich and the poor. Therefore, the state needs to check that poverty must not be deep rooted else it would cause inflation through imposition of variety of heavy taxes on the tax payers. Also, the government needs to enforce stringent policies to control crime, terrorism and border disputes which increases their residents’ insecurities and reduces their happiness. Succinctly, to make countries more livable and ensure physical and mental well-being of the natives although economic growth is imperative yet a range of other developments are much needed as these are interrelated.
Despite high Gross Domestic Product and per capita income in
many
countries
, the present scenario is grim as every social and national challenge is competing with each other to become a matter of grave concern for the entire world. I believe though
economic
growth is the major requirement for any
country
yet
not sufficient to
make
the
countries
more livable.

Apparently
, the
economic
progress of a
country
enables it to develop its infrastructure, subsidize education and health services for their denizens and gear up transportation network. These facilities enhance
human development index
of their natives which
further
improves
their efficiency and
thus
basic living standards.
Also
, it is state funding that supports research and development and maintenance of art and culture which thereby promotes tourism.

Although industrialization contributes in
economic
growth
yet
it
must
be ensured
that it does not lead to deforestation in the eco-sensitive areas and
thus
leading to ecological imbalance.
Also
, though the United States has the highest GDP, it being the third major polluter in the world has alarming levels of carbon emissions which affect human health.

Economic progress,
however
, does not denote equal distribution of wealth
rather
at times leads to concentration of wealth in a few hands which is responsible for widening of gap between the rich and the poor.
Therefore
, the state needs to
check
that poverty
must
not be
deep rooted
else it would cause inflation through imposition of variety of heavy taxes on the tax payers.
Also
, the
government
needs to enforce stringent policies to control crime, terrorism and border disputes which increases their residents’ insecurities and
reduces
their happiness.

Succinctly
, to
make
countries
more livable and ensure physical and mental well-being of the natives although
economic
growth is imperative
yet
a range of other developments are
much needed
as these
are interrelated
.
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IELTS essay Some believe that economic progress is the major requirement for any country whereas others say that various other developments are needed more than it. How far do you agree?

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