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Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world v.23

Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world v. 23
Vitality is a powerful commodity that controls the functioning of the entire earth. Solar spirit obtained from the light rays of our Sun has seen a recent rise in its popularity, especially as a source of vitality in many households across the globe. There is a possible explanation for this situation. Intensity production from non-renewable sources like coal and petrol will be difficult / will be less viable in the near future not only because of the reduction in their reserve, but also due to the high costs quoted by the countries which hold their reserves. Therefore the entire globe has become busy in developing renewable sources of strength. Since sunlight is available in abundance, solar power has become a better alternative to other forms of toughness. Solar stamina has its pros and cons, but the pros outweigh its cons. An advantage of solar spirit is that it can be harnessed without having to build expensive power plants. Families can install solar panels on their roofs and generate an adequate amount of intensity to run household appliances such as lights, fans, heaters, refrigerators and so on. It is very simple and just needs the Sun out there in the sky. It is also clean and does not pollute the land or the air. On the other hand, solar efficiency grids come with their own price which is affordable to the underdeveloped and developing countries around the Equator. These are the countries which benefit most from the solar power owing to their geographical location. In the developed western earth the situation is quite the opposite. These countries are cold and receive only a small amount of sunlight. Consequently, not much solar intensity can be generated there. Despite these shortcomings, Germany has emerged as the nature leader in solar strength production, according to a recent report issued by WHO. Germans have well understood the proverb “Make hay while the Sun shines”. It is now time for the entire earth to follow suit. To conclude, solar capability is gaining popularity because it is safe and clean. In the coming years as the technology develops and solar panels become more affordable, its popularity will only increase.
Vitality is a powerful commodity that controls the functioning of the entire earth.
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Solar
spirit obtained from the light rays of our Sun has
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seen
a recent rise in its popularity,
especially
as a source of vitality in
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many
households across the globe.

There is a possible explanation for this situation. Intensity production from non-renewable sources like coal and petrol will be difficult / will be less viable in the near future not
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only
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because
of the reduction in their reserve,
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but
also
due to the high costs quoted by the
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countries
which hold their reserves.
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Therefore
the entire globe has become busy in developing renewable sources of strength. Since sunlight is available in abundance,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
solar
power has become a better alternative to other forms of toughness.

Solar stamina has its pros and cons,
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but
the pros outweigh its cons. An advantage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
solar
spirit is that it can
be harnessed
without having to build expensive power plants. Families can install
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
solar
panels on their roofs and generate an adequate amount of intensity to run household appliances such as lights, fans, heaters, refrigerators and
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so
on. It is
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very
simple and
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just
needs the Sun out there in the sky. It is
also
clean and does not pollute the land or the air.

On the other hand
,
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solar
efficiency grids
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come
with their
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own
price which is affordable to the underdeveloped and developing
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countries
around the Equator. These are the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
which benefit most from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
solar
power owing to their geographical location. In the developed western earth the situation is quite the opposite. These
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countries
are
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cold
and receive
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only
a
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small
amount of sunlight.
Consequently
, not much
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
solar
intensity can
be generated
there. Despite these shortcomings, Germany has emerged as the nature leader in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
solar
strength production, according to a recent report issued by
Did you mean "whom"?
WHO
. Germans have well understood the proverb “
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Make
hay while the Sun shines”. It is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
time for the entire earth to follow suit.

To conclude
,
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solar
capability is gaining popularity
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it is safe and clean. In the coming years as the technology develops and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
solar
panels become more affordable, its popularity will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
increase.
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IELTS essay Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world v. 23

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
362 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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