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Society is based on rules and laws. It could not function if individuals were free to do whatever they wanted to do. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Society is based on rules and laws. It could not function if individuals were free to do whatever they wanted to do. GA2j
Acts and regulations are known to play a fundamental role in any society. I completely agree that rules and laws are necessary for nations' normal function; because laws exist to ensure the safety of its citizens by reducing crime and protecting their fundamental rights. The first reason is that legal restrictions act as a deterrent to would-be criminals. In other words, those who intend to commit a crime might refrain from doing so if they know in advance that their wrongdoings would be punished. For instance, in Iran, not only does the death penalty exist for grave crimes such as murder or rape, but capital punishment is also for less serious ones such as armed robbery, blasphemy, drug dealing, or adultery. Thus, the law forces the criminal to weigh well the risks from his criminal actions; as a result, not all potential criminals are ready for the type of punishment described above and give up malice. This example illustrates how laws are playing a deterrent role against severe and more minor crimes. Laws also protect the fundamental rights of each citizen. Firstly, they guarantee that every member of society is entitled to freedom of choice, freedom of speech, and religious freedom. Take multinational Canada as a vivid example, where every person's rights are protected regardless of their belonging to any group. This attitude of the state towards the population has allowed the country to become a genuinely multicultural refuge for people from countries where people are less protected. Thanks to that, Canada tops the 2019 ranking of countries in terms of happiness, equality, and citizens' security. In conclusion, I fully agree that rules and laws are essential for a country's function and have to be strictly followed and obliged for every citizen of it. If a community did not have any rules or laws, it would lead to an appalling crime rate and violation of democratic rights and freedoms of people.
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are known
to play a fundamental role in any society. I completely
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agree
that
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rules
and
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laws
are necessary for nations' normal function;
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because
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laws
exist to ensure the safety of its citizens by reducing
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crime
and protecting their fundamental rights.

The
first
reason is that legal restrictions act as a deterrent to would-be
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criminals
.
In other words
, those who intend to commit a
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crime
might refrain from doing
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so
if they know in advance that their wrongdoings would
be punished
.
For instance
, in Iran, not
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only
does the death penalty exist for grave
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crimes
such as murder or rape,
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but
capital punishment is
also
for less serious ones such as armed robbery, blasphemy, drug dealing, or adultery.
Thus
, the
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law
forces the
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criminal
to weigh well the
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risks
from his
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criminal
actions;
as a result
, not all potential
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criminals
are ready for the type of punishment
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described
above and give up malice. This example illustrates how
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laws
are playing a deterrent role against severe and more minor crimes.

Laws
also
protect the fundamental rights of each citizen.
Firstly
, they guarantee that every member of society
is entitled
to
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freedom
of choice,
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freedom
of speech, and religious
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freedom
. Take multinational Canada as a vivid example, where every person's rights
are protected
regardless of their belonging to any group. This attitude of the state towards the population has
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allowed
the country to become a
genuinely
multicultural refuge for
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people
from countries where
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people
are less protected. Thanks to that, Canada tops the 2019 ranking of countries in terms of happiness, equality, and citizens' security.

In conclusion
, I
fully
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agree
that
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rules
and
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laws
are essential for a country's function and
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have to
be
strictly
followed and obliged for every citizen of it. If a community did not have any
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rules
or
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laws
, it would lead to an appalling
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crime
rate and violation of democratic rights and
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freedoms
of
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people
.

IELTS essay Society is based on rules and laws. It could not function if individuals were free to do whatever they wanted to do.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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