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Social media lets us connect with more people, but some believe it detracts from our real life interactions, and therefore damages our personal relationships. Do you agree or disagree?

Social media lets us connect with more people, but some believe it detracts from our real life interactions, and therefore damages our personal relationships. 6aJO0
First of all, it is undeniable the benefit of social media, which can help us connect internationally. It can be seen that helps us update the situation of other countries, people can interact with friends in many places, help us learn many things as well as improve foreign languages. For example, even though people are only in Vietnam, the BITU app can help us meet foreigners, then we can chat, study and exchange cultures to help us understand more about the country and their culture.
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IELTS essay Social media lets us connect with more people, but some believe it detracts from our real life interactions, and therefore damages our personal relationships.

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