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Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages? ylOV
Nowadays, almost everyone is on one social networking site or another. Some people believe that there are downsides to posting personal data on social networking platforms. In my opinion, this is true to a great extent and I generally believe that the drawbacks of using social media eclipse the benefits. Social media websites and applications allow people to connect with friends and family. They enable people to trace long lost friends and stay in touch with relatives. This is a boon for individuals living away from their near and dear ones. Social media also enables like-minded people to form virtual communities where they can share their interests and opinions, and work together for their favourite causes. Similarly, for business savvy people, it is an ideal place to find new customers and promote their products. On the downside, social media has plenty of negative aspects. Over the years, it has become a platform to show off. Many people are only using it to brag about their achievements and possessions. They frequently post on Facebook or Instagram photos and stories of their expensive acquisitions and exotic vacations. This can make their less privileged friends and acquaintances feel inferior. Another downside is that people are indiscriminately posting their personal information online oblivious to the fact that it can be stolen and/or misused. For instance, when traveling people use geo-tagging apps to advertise their current location, they increase the risk of their home being burgled. Personal photos posted online can also be misused and the consequences can be disastrous. Worse than that, sometimes the owners of such platforms sell user data for profit, which may as well be used by phishers and scammers. In short, social media can be a great platform to connect with people only when it is used for its intended purpose, but in reality, these days, it is for many people merely a means to show off, and for others it is a goldmine of personal data to exploit, which explains why I am convinced that its downsides outweigh the upsides.
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social
networking site or another.
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Some
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people
believe that there are
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downsides
to posting
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personal
data on
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social
networking
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platforms
. In my opinion, this is true to a great extent and I
generally
believe that the drawbacks of using
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social
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media
eclipse the benefits.

Social
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media
websites and applications
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allow
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people
to connect with friends and family. They enable
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people
to trace
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long lost
friends and stay in touch with relatives. This is a boon for individuals living away from their near and dear ones.
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Social
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media
also
enables like-minded
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people
to form virtual communities where they can share their interests and opinions, and work together for their
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favourite
causes.
Similarly
, for business savvy
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people
, it is an ideal place to find new customers and promote their products.

On the
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downside
,
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social
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media
has
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plenty
of
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negative
aspects. Over the years, it has become a
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platform
to
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show
off.
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people
are
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only
using it to brag about their achievements and possessions. They
frequently
post on Facebook or Instagram photos and stories of their expensive acquisitions and exotic vacations. This can
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make
their less privileged friends and acquaintances feel inferior. Another
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downside
is that
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people
are
indiscriminately
posting their
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personal
information online oblivious to the fact that it can
be stolen
and/or misused.
For instance
, when traveling
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people
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use
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geo-tagging
apps to advertise their
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current
location, they increase the
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risk
of their home
being burgled
.
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Personal
photos posted online can
also
be misused
and the consequences can be disastrous. Worse than that,
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sometimes
the owners of such
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platforms
sell user data for profit, which may
as well
be
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used
by phishers and scammers.

In short,
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social
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media
can be a great
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platform
to connect with
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people
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only
when it is
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used
for its intended purpose,
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but
in reality, these days, it is for
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many
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people
merely
a means to
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show
off, and for others it is a goldmine of
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personal
data to exploit, which
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explains
why I
am convinced
that its
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downsides
outweigh the upsides.

IELTS essay Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

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