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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Smoking should not be permitted in restaurants, and state laws that prohibit it should be held.

Smoking should not be permitted in restaurants, and state laws that prohibit it should be held. Yky8j
In today’s era of self-awareness of smoking’s detrimental effects, people today are restricting smoking in public places, particularly in restaurants, in my opinion, where smoking should be strictly banned due to several reasons that I will shed light on in this essay. To begin with, smoking in public restaurants could cause an excessively adverse impact on not only smokers but people who do not as well. To be specific, in accordance with globally admitted research, one cigarette contains millions of chemical distributions which unfavorably affect a human being’s life leading to arduous ailments or even death. Not only the smokers; however, for a long time we have been informed about the dangers of smoke inhaled by non-smokers. My own experience can be a compelling example. When I was a child, I had an uncle who used to consume 1 pack of cigarette per day for a lifetime, gradually his condition of health dropped off drastically and eventually he could not speak by himself but for the assistance of supporting devices. Moreover, his wife and kids in the family had some severe illness caused by the chemicals of cigarettes even though they did not smoke at all. As a result, it is merely the restaurant's responsibility to protect their nonsmoking customers. (conclusion sentence) Furthermore, smoking in restaurants would negatively spoil the taste of foods and worsen the experience of other customers. Simply saying, as soon as the dishes meet the smoke of cigarettes, all the enticing smell and tastes of the food would be all replaced by the unpleasant smell of smoke. Some people might say that it is their right to smoke to enjoy their moment in a restaurant. This is partly true as in the past when people did not fully take into account the downside consequences of smoking. For instance, once I was having a meal in a restaurant, I sat next to a man who was smoking a lot. Consequently, when my dishes came out, all I could taste was the uncomfortable sense of smoke, which upset my meal a lot. As time elapses, people would even take it amiss if someone smoked in the restaurant which diminished the experience of others guests. In brief, smoking in restaurants overall do more harm than good for both smokers and people around thanks to its detrimental drawbacks. This should also prompt the state law to bring about regulations against smoking in restaurants to end this trend.
In
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today
’s era of self-awareness of
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smoking’s
detrimental effects,
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people
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today
are restricting
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smoking
in public places,
particularly
in
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restaurants
, in my opinion, where
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smoking
should be
strictly
banned due to several reasons that I will shed light on in this essay.

To
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begin
with,
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smoking
in public
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restaurants
could cause an
excessively
adverse impact on not
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only
smokers
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but
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people
who do not
as well
. To be specific, in accordance with globally admitted research, one
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cigarette
contains millions of chemical distributions which
unfavorably
affect a human being’s life leading to arduous ailments or even death. Not
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only
the smokers;
however
, for a long time we have
been informed
about the
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dangers
of
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smoke
inhaled by non-smokers. My
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own
experience can be a compelling example. When I was a child, I had an uncle who
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used
to consume 1 pack of
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cigarette
per day for a lifetime,
gradually
his condition of health dropped off
drastically
and
eventually
he could not speak by himself
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but
for the assistance of supporting devices.
Moreover
, his wife and kids in the family had
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some
severe illness caused by the chemicals of
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cigarettes
even though
they did not
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smoke
at all.
As a result
, it is
merely
the restaurant's responsibility to protect their nonsmoking customers. (conclusion sentence)

Furthermore
,
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smoking
in
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restaurants
would
negatively
spoil the taste of foods and worsen the experience of other customers.
Simply
saying, as
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soon
as the dishes
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meet
the
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smoke
of
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cigarettes
, all the enticing smell and tastes of the food would be all replaced by the unpleasant smell of
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smoke
.
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Some
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people
might say that it is their right to
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smoke
to enjoy their moment in a
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restaurant
. This is partly true as in the past when
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people
did not
fully
take into account the downside consequences of
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smoking
.
For instance
, once I was having a meal in a
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restaurant
, I sat
next
to a
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man
who was
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smoking
a lot.
Consequently
, when my dishes came out, all I could taste was the uncomfortable sense of
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smoke
, which upset my meal a lot. As time elapses,
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people
would even take it amiss if someone smoked in the
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restaurant
which diminished the experience of others guests.

In brief
,
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smoking
in
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restaurants
overall
do more harm than
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good
for both smokers and
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people
around thanks to its detrimental drawbacks. This should
also
prompt the state law to bring about regulations against
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smoking
in
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restaurants
to
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end
this trend.
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IELTS essay Smoking should not be permitted in restaurants, and state laws that prohibit it should be held.

Essay
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4 paragraphs
407 words
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