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Smoking is injurious to health and its addiction and serious health reactions have increased into an alarming level in today’s world. I strongly agree to the opinion of its prohibition.

Smoking is injurious to health and its addiction and serious health reactions have increased into an alarming level in today’s world. I strongly agree to the opinion of its prohibition. a7Onm
Firstly, we all know that cigarettes and other tobacco products are very dangerous for all human beings. Even its manufacturers label on it that “cigarette smoking can kill you” or “it is not good for your health”. Likewise, once I saw a cigarette packet, it clearly had a label mentioning “smoking cigarettes causes lung cancer”. So even the manufactures are bound to inform his users that these are highly injurious to their health. Secondly, in today’s world we are suffering from a pandemic caused by Coronavirus and other poor atmospheric issues i. e. smog. We have a lot of suffering going on because of these illnesses in our surroundings which is damaging our lungs so in any case cigarettes and other tobacco products will cause disastrous effects to one’s health. For instance, I had an uncle who was a chain smoker. We lost him in a pandemic because his lungs were already affected due to this bad habit. Sadly, his lung could not restrain the burden of Covid. Although, all people know it’s killing effects but still its consumption is increasing, so to protect everyone's health the government should completely ban production of such products. However, the tobacco industry and its users will oppose this opinion but the government should appreciate them to cooperate and understand the long term benefits of human health. Government should appreciate the production of such alternative products which can be used instead of cigarettes and other tobacco stuff. For example tobacco flavor spray or chewing gum which can be used to fulfill your smoking desire without affecting your health. In a nutshell, it is extremely beneficial for the public health if the government restricts the production of tobacco products.
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, we all know that
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dangerous
for all human beings. Even its manufacturers label on it that
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“cigarette
smoking can kill you” or “it is not
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good
for your
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health”
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Likewise
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saw
a
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cigarette
packet, it
clearly
had a label mentioning “smoking
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cigarettes
causes lung cancer”.
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even the manufactures
are bound
to inform his users that these are
highly
injurious to their health.

Secondly
, in
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today
’s world we are suffering from a pandemic caused by Coronavirus and
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other
poor atmospheric issues
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smog. We have
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a lot of
suffering going on
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because
of these illnesses in our surroundings which is damaging our lungs
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so
in any case
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cigarettes
and
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other
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tobacco
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products
will cause disastrous effects to one’s
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health
.
For instance
, I had an uncle who was a chain smoker. We lost him in a pandemic
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because
his lungs were already
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affected
due to this
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bad
habit.
Sadly
, his lung could not restrain the burden of
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Covid
.

Although, all
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people
know it’s killing effects
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but
still
its consumption is increasing,
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so
to protect everyone's
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health
the
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government
should completely ban production of such
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products
.
However
, the
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tobacco
industry and its users will oppose this opinion
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but
the
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government
should appreciate them to cooperate and understand the long term benefits of human
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health
.
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Government
should appreciate the production of such alternative
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products
which can be
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used
instead
of
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cigarettes
and
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other
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tobacco
stuff.
For example
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tobacco
flavor spray or chewing gum which can be
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used
to fulfill your smoking desire without affecting your health.

In a nutshell, it is
extremely
beneficial for the public
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health
if the
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government
restricts the production of
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tobacco
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products
.
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IELTS essay Smoking is injurious to health and its addiction and serious health reactions have increased into an alarming level in today’s world. I strongly agree to the opinion of its prohibition.

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284 words
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