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Should the government put a tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to eat more healthily?

Should the government put a tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to eat more healthily? a7jMo
In today's busy world, having meals at junk food stores seems to be a conventional eating habit for many people who do not have enough time to enjoy meals. However, it is undeniable that consuming too much fast food causes a significant detriment to our health. In my perspective, the authorities should put a high tax on fast food in order to boost individuals' healthy eating habits. The primary reason for this is that unhealthy substances are expected to be harmful to people's systems if ingested in large quantities. In other words, fast food is believed to be the main reason leading to obesity due to a large amount of oil and sugar in fast-prepared products. Moreover, people, especially nowadays teenagers, are prone to diabetes, high blood pressure and some psychological issues such as distress or feeling starving all the time. Recent research has shown that people in the USA, which is claimed to consume the largest amount of junk food in the world, are getting overweight six times faster than other nations. American Scientists also suggest that individuals should maintain a healthy diet to ameliorate health issues. What can be seen from this is that health problems will get more acute if people eat fast food too often. Another reason is that the tax coming from the fast food industry could be used to build the state health care systems for the community. To be more specific, the government holds a notion that it is the most effective way to utilize the lucrative income from the tax because the more state hospitals are constructed, the more people have opportunities to enjoy free treatment. In various European countries, a lot of health care systems are built by using money from fast food buyers to create a quality chance for impoverished citizens. Nevertheless, I also claim that the high tax from unwholesome substances could be paid for not only state hospitals but also charity purposes. It is inferred from the passage that tax should be collected to use for advantageous purposes to the community. To sum up, it is a should for the government to put a high tax on the fast food industry in order to inspire a wellbeing lifestyle and use it for positive reasons. It is recommended that mankind should have a healthy diet by eating more veggies and stop ingesting harmful junk food.
In
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today
's busy world, having meals at junk
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food
stores seems to be a conventional eating habit for
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many
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people
who do not have
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enough
time to enjoy meals.
However
, it is undeniable that consuming too much
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fast
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food
causes a significant detriment to our
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health
. In my perspective, the authorities should put a
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high
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tax
on
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fast
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food
in order to boost individuals' healthy eating habits.

The primary
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reason
for this is that unhealthy substances are
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expected
to be harmful to
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people
's systems if ingested in large quantities.
In other words
,
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fast
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food
is believed
to be the main
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reason
leading to obesity due to a large amount of oil and sugar in
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fast
-prepared products.
Moreover
,
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people
,
especially
nowadays
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teenagers
, are prone to diabetes,
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high
blood pressure and
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some
psychological issues such as distress or feeling starving all the time. Recent research has shown that
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people
in the USA, which
is claimed
to consume the largest amount of junk
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food
in the world, are getting overweight six times faster than other nations. American Scientists
also
suggest that individuals should maintain a healthy diet to ameliorate
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health
issues. What can be
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seen
from this is that
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health
problems will
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get
more acute if
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people
eat
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fast
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food
too
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often
.

Another
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reason
is that the
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tax
coming from the
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fast
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food
industry could be
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used
to build the state
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health
care systems for the community. To be more specific, the
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government
holds a notion that it is the most effective way to utilize the lucrative income from the
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tax
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because
the more state hospitals
are constructed
, the more
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people
have opportunities to enjoy free treatment. In various European countries,
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a lot of
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health
care systems
are built
by using money from
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fast
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food
buyers to create a quality chance for impoverished citizens.
Nevertheless
, I
also
claim that the
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high
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tax
from unwholesome substances could
be paid
for not
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only
state hospitals
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but
also
charity purposes. It
is inferred
from the passage that
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tax
should
be collected
to
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use
for advantageous purposes to the community.

To sum up, it is a should for the
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government
to put a
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high
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tax
on the
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fast
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food
industry in order to inspire a
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wellbeing
lifestyle and
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use
it for
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positive
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reasons
. It
is recommended
that mankind should have a healthy diet by eating more veggies and
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stop
ingesting harmful junk
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food
.
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IELTS essay Should the government put a tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to eat more healthily?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
396 words
6.0
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