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Should teenagers get pocket money

Should teenagers get pocket money BwAOp
Some people believe that teenagers need to be financially independent while others believe that teenagers are not yet mature enough. The crux of this debate is whether young adults need to be given pocket money. There are a variety of reasons why teenagers need to be given pocket money. Firstly, it gives them a sense of responsibility. Having to manage their expenses within a fixed budget will teach them the value of money. They will think before spending on frivolous things and learn to plan ahead. Pocket money will also aide the decision making skills of teenagers. At this stage of their lives, their brains are still evolving and they are learning to make decisions. Managing their monthly allowance will teach teenagers several decision making skills such as balancing long and short term desires, making tradeoffs, saving up for a goal, etc.
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. There are a variety of reasons why
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spending on frivolous things and learn to plan ahead. Pocket
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decision making
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teenagers
. At this stage of their
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evolving and
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decision making
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such as balancing long and short term desires, making
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IELTS essay Should teenagers get pocket money

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
142 words
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