Search
Vocabularying
Listening
Reading
1. Academic
2. General
Writing
1. IELTSWriting Checker
2. IELTS Writing Samples
Speaking

Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.

Should mobile phones be banned in primary schools?

Should mobile phones be banned in primary schools? NrlEg

Mobile phone is a version of technology which its purpose is to connect people around the world. Now, children are allowed to use mobile phone every time and everywhere even in schools. Although mobile phones have many effectively functions for different purposes, I think they should be forbidden in primary schools because of two main reasons. First of all, mobile phones have an effect on children’s development and health. If children overuse them too much, they can harm children’s eyes. In addition, the radiation is not good for health and brain especially first 5 years old. Consequently, the rate of short-sighted increasingly develop and it happens in younger people. Second, mobile phones can impact on children’s schoolwork. They neglect studying because of playing games or chatting with friends. As a result, if they can’t concentrate the lessons, they will get behind their classmates. Third, mobile phones may impair children’s limited communication. If they fasten their eyes on mobile phone regularly, they can’t learn how to talk and share emotion or their point to others. Consequently, they can get autism and talking ability won’t be fast and fluent when they grow up. To sum up, mobile phones are not bad but wrong way of using can cause consequences for children’s health and development especially they are in schools. So parents should forbid children when they study in schools or even at home. Instead, children should be talked more, do outdoor activities after studying to guarantee children’s comprehensive development.

Mobile You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phone
 is a version of technology which its purpose is to connect This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 around the world. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
Now
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children
 are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:admissible
allowed
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 mobile You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phone
 every time and everywhere even in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstituteacademyuniversityhalljailfaculty
schools
. Although mobile You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phones
 have This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
effectively
 functions for This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 purposes, I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 they should be forbidden
 in primary You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstituteacademyuniversityhalljailfaculty
schools
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of two main reasons.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, mobile You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phones
 have an effect on You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children’s
 development and health. If You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children
 overuse them too much, they can harm You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children’s
 eyes. In addition
, the radiation is not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 for health and brain especially
first
 5 years This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
. Consequently
, the rate of short-sighted increasingly
 develop and it happens in younger This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
.

Second, mobile You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phones
 can impact on You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children’s
 schoolwork. They neglect studying This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of playing games or chatting with friends. As a result
, if they can’t concentrate the lessons, they will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 behind their classmates.

Third, mobile You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phones
 may impair You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children’s
 limited communication. If they fasten their eyes on mobile You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phone
regularly
, they can’t learn how to talk and share emotion or their point to others. Consequently
, they can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 autism and talking ability won’t be This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:quickrapidswiftprompt
fast
 and fluent when they grow up.

To sum up, mobile You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phones
 are not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :evil
bad
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:incorrect
wrong
 way of using can cause consequences for You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children’s
 health and development especially
 they are in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstituteacademyuniversityhalljailfaculty
schools
. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
 parents should forbid You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children
 when they study in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstituteacademyuniversityhalljailfaculty
schools
 or even at home. Instead
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children
 should be talked
 more, do outdoor activities after studying to guarantee You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children’s
 comprehensive development. 