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Should Animals Be Kept in Zoos?

Should Animals Be Kept in Zoos? YRGRV
Talking about Zoos we assume that only wild animals are being kept there, not domestic ones. Zoos are some kind of animals’ prison. For sure a better living place for wild animals is in their natural habitat. I think it has both advantages and disadvantages keeping wild animals in captivity. Zoos save animals from extinction/dying, Zoos rescue injured animals which could not survive in wild nature Besides, if the wild animal was being kept in Zoo for a long time, it would be very cruel to let him out after all. Zoos are some kind of entertainment because adults and children like to go there and get acquainted with the animals, feed them.
Talking about Zoos we assume that
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only
wild
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animals
are being
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kept
there, not domestic ones. Zoos are
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some
kind of
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animals’
prison. For sure a better living place for wild
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animals
is in their natural habitat.

I
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think
it has both advantages and disadvantages keeping wild
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animals
in captivity.

Zoos save
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animals
from extinction/dying,

Zoos rescue injured
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animals
which could not survive in wild nature

Besides
, if the wild
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animal
was being
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kept
in Zoo for a long time, it would be
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very
cruel to
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let
him out
after all
.

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Zoos
are
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some
kind of entertainment
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because
adults and children like to go there and
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get
acquainted with the
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animals
, feed them.
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IELTS essay Should Animals Be Kept in Zoos?

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