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Schools are being spending a lot of time teaching traditional subjects such as history while a number of people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skill which help students to find a job.

Schools are being spending a lot of time teaching traditional subjects such as history while a number of people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skill which help students to find a job. 2nYX
Schools are being spending a lot of time teaching traditional subjects such as history while a number of people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skill which help students to find a job. I personally agree with this statement. This is the 21st century, where skills is must to get a job. Schools should more focus on subject that provides the skills to the students. Nowadays many academy are providing skills related education. For example: - recently the curriculum development of nepal has implemented new subjects related to skills,
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a job. Schools should more focus on subject that provides the
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to the students. Nowadays
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are providing
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IELTS essay Schools are being spending a lot of time teaching traditional subjects such as history while a number of people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skill which help students to find a job.

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