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Salmon, a fish prized for both food and sport, has a complex life cycle. After spending several years in the ocean, adult salmon travel back to the freshwater streams where they were originally spawned, to lay their eggs. the females bury the eggs under t

Salmon, a fish prized for both food and sport, has a complex life cycle. After spending several years in the ocean, adult salmon travel back to the freshwater streams where they were originally spawned, to lay their eggs. the females bury the eggs under t 2bgRw
The reading and the lecture both discusses about the importance of current for the salmons. The author of the reading feels that the devastating effects of the development can be restored by taking some measures. The lecturer challenges the claims made by the author. He is of the opinion that the measures are harmful and partial solution for the salmons. To begin with, the author argues that the damming of the river has severely affected the salmons. The article mentions that by building dams stream of the river of the river had slowed down making difficult for the smolts and adult salmons to travel. The lecturer further elaborates on the claim made by the lecturer. he claims that before building dams salmons took 6-20 days to travel and now it has been increased to 60 days. Additionally, he says this slowdown had made less smolts to reach oceans and obviously, then few adults will come back for breeding. Secondly, the writer mentions if such condition persists there could be a complete eradication of the salmons. The lecturer elaborates more on this topic. He provides that the speed of the stream of the river is really important for the survival of the salmons as their body while travelling goes through various physiological changes to adapt to the salt water. Since, now the salmons are taking a prolonged time to reach their destination their body is adapted to salt water while they being still in fresh water. Finally, the author posits that various artificial measures can help restoring their population like barge can be used to increase the water stream, which will make them travel at a faster rate. Moreover, in the article it is stated that by decreasing the water level during salmons breeding period can make the water current increase and will help in restoring their population. In contrast the lecturer position is that above mentioned methods are not successful. He notes that barge has actually involved in killing salmons rather than improving the situation and increasing the water stream in spring is a partial solution. In addition, such methods have faced criticism from the electricity producing companies.
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current
for the salmons. The
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author
of the reading feels that the devastating effects of the development can
be restored
by taking
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some
measures.
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The
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lecturer
challenges the claims made by the
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author
. He is of the opinion that the measures are harmful and partial solution for the salmons.

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begin
with, the
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author
argues that the damming of the
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river
has
severely
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affected
the salmons. The article mentions that by building dams
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stream
of the
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river
of the
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river
had slowed down making difficult for the
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smolts
and adult salmons to travel. The
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lecturer
further
elaborates on the claim made by the
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lecturer
.
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he
claims that
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before
building dams salmons took 6-20 days to travel and
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now
it has
been increased
to 60 days.
Additionally
, he says this slowdown had made
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less
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smolts
to reach oceans and
obviously
, then few adults will
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come
back for breeding.

Secondly
, the writer mentions if such condition persists there could be a complete eradication of the salmons. The
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lecturer
elaborates more on this topic. He provides that the speed of the
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stream
of the
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river
is
really
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important
for the survival of the salmons as their body while travelling goes through various physiological
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changes
to adapt to the salt
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water
. Since,
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now
the salmons are taking a prolonged time to reach their destination their body
is adapted
to salt
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water
while they being
still
in fresh water.

Finally
, the
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author
posits that various artificial measures can
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help
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restoring
their population like barge can be
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used
to increase the
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water
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stream
, which will
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make
them travel at a faster rate.
Moreover
, in the article it
is stated
that by decreasing the
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water
level during salmons breeding period can
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make
the
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water
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current
increase and will
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help
in restoring their population. In
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contrast
the
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lecturer
position is that above mentioned methods are not successful. He notes that barge has actually involved in killing salmons
rather
than improving the situation and increasing the
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water
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stream
in spring is a partial solution.
In addition
, such methods have faced criticism from the electricity producing
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companies
.
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IELTS essay Salmon, a fish prized for both food and sport, has a complex life cycle. After spending several years in the ocean, adult salmon travel back to the freshwater streams where they were originally spawned, to lay their eggs. the females bury the eggs under t

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358 words
5.5
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