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Rising University fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects , like philosophy and history and only offer practical degree courses that maximise chances of employment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It has been seen that due to soaring tertiary education expenses as well as unemployment for fresher graduates, it is believed by some masses that philosophy and history should not be taught in colleges and they should put more emphasis on practical subjects which have relatively more work opportunities. I agree with this statement to a large extent. There are many factors why i am in favour of practical courses ought to teach in universities. First of all, in this era of science and technology, it is of utmost importance to have the practical knowledge of computers. This is because computers have been used in every field like medical, teaching, business, banking and many more others. So if youngsters have the practical information of computers, they can get jobs in IT sector and in reputed multinational companies as well, which will offer them handsome remuneration. Secondly, students must encourage to opt science courses such as medical and non medical in higher education. As in this high techno savvy era, the demand of engineers, doctors and nurses etcetera is very high. If they gain practical knowledge in such fields, then they will be able to earn handsome salary package for their livelihood. However, I do believe that the contribution of history and philosophy subjects should not be overlooked. It is a fact that history helps individuals to connect with our roots. By studying history, they come across their rich heritage and culture, traditions, rituals and it depicts uniqueness of their nation. Furthermore, philosophy also develops creativity and imagination which is crucial for further progress in life. In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that although having practical knowledge is the need of the hour, at the same time arts subjects also have a great role to play in the society.
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that due to soaring tertiary education expenses
as well
as unemployment for fresher graduates, it
is believed
by
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some
masses that philosophy and
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history
should not
be taught
in
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colleges and
they should put more emphasis on
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practical
subjects which have
relatively
more work opportunities. I
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agree
with this statement to a large extent.

There are
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many
factors why
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i
am in
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favour
of
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practical
courses ought to teach in universities.
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First of all
, in this era of science and technology, it is of utmost importance to have the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
practical
knowledge of computers. This is
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because
computers have been
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used
in every field like medical, teaching, business, banking and
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many
more others.
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So
if youngsters have the
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practical
information of computers, they can
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get
jobs in IT sector and in reputed multinational
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companies
as well
, which will offer them handsome remuneration.
Secondly
, students
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must
encourage
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to opt
science courses such as medical and
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non medical
in higher education. As in this high techno savvy era, the demand of engineers, doctors and nurses etcetera is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
high. If they gain
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
practical
knowledge in such fields, then they will be able to earn handsome salary package for their livelihood.

However
, I do believe that the contribution of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
history
and philosophy subjects should not
be overlooked
. It is a fact that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
history
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
individuals to connect with our roots. By studying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
history
, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
across their rich heritage and culture, traditions, rituals and it depicts uniqueness of their nation.
Furthermore
, philosophy
also
develops creativity and imagination which is crucial for
further
progress in life.

In conclusion
, I would like to reiterate that although having
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
practical
knowledge is the need of the hour, at the same time arts subjects
also
have a great role to play in the society.
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IELTS essay Rising University fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history and only offer practical degree courses that maximise chances of employment.

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