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Write about the following topic: Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

: Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience r8YRl
Some economically established countries around the world often tend to support other third world countries by providing financial help for the growth of the people and their country. However, providing the poor countries with just economical help is not enough, they should try to provide facilities for people migrating from poor countries to their country. The facilities can include providing education, affordable accomodations and fullfing needs for a better living, for a short period of time. So they can return to their countries well educated and do their bit for the development of their country. If the rich countries tend to support the poor countries just through finance, then the poor countries might not be able to invest money and cover all of resources that are required for their develpment. Instead, they will have to precisely spend on just few sectors. This might be an advantage for one but a disadvantage for the others. For instance, if the government of the poor country decides to invest the given money into improving medical facilities, they might have to put improving of the education sector on hold for sometime until they gather enough money to do so. This can be a significant drawback as the people are still suffereing and being a prey of the poor facilities of a third world country. Overall, the financially stable countries must open their doors by welcomimg people from under-developed or developing countries, that can make the most of the facilities, by educating them which will in return help in the development and giving exposure to the people and their countries.
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around the world
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often
tend to support other third world
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countries
by providing financial
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help
for the growth of the
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people
and their
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country
.
However
, providing the
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poor
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countries
with
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just
economical
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help
is not
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enough
, they should try to provide facilities for
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people
migrating from
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poor
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countries
to their
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country
. The facilities can include providing education, affordable
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accomodations
and
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fullfing
needs for a better living, for a short period of time.
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So
they can return to their
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countries
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well educated
and do their bit for the development of their
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country
. If the rich
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countries
tend to support the
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poor
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countries
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just
through finance, then the
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poor
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countries
might not be able to invest money and cover
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, they will
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precisely
spend on
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just
few sectors. This might be an advantage for one
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but
a disadvantage for the others.
For instance
, if the
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government
of the
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poor
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country
decides to invest the
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given
money into improving medical facilities, they might
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have to
put improving of the education sector on hold for sometime until they gather
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enough
money to do
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. This can be a significant drawback as the
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people
are
still
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suffereing
and being a prey of the
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poor
facilities of a third world country.

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, the
financially
stable
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countries
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must
open their doors by
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welcomimg
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people
from under-developed or developing
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countries
, that can
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make
the most of the facilities, by educating them which will in return
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help
in the development and giving exposure to the
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people
and their
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countries
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IELTS essay : Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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