Search
Vocabularying
Listening
Reading
1. Academic
2. General
Writing
1. IELTSWriting Checker
2. IELTS Writing Samples
Speaking

Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.

Research shows that a number of younger people use social media platforms in order to meet and greet privately.The world

Research shows that a number of younger people use social media platforms in order to meet and greet privately. The world GlAyg

Research shows that a number of younger people use social media platforms in order to meet and greet privately. The world that is made by them are called virtual world. Yet, there are certain ways to inspire them towards materialistic world. This essay is going to articulate the possible aspect of it along with my perception in upcoming paragraphs. To embark on, in a modern era, as mostly people prefer to live in nuclear families due to their working perspectives, and it could be the strong reason why their adolescents keep them introvert. For example, according to the one news published by The Times Square 85 % parents are worked outside from dawn to dusk in order to give a better lifestyle to their children. Consequently, they have to leave them at home, and in this way young children feel alone and do not get time to go outside and would not able to co operate with outer world as a result they start finding virtual people whomever they could connect with. Therefore it might be the reason behind why youth are getting much indulged in online society. Furthermore, as we know technology is burgeoning by leaps and bounds. Whatsapp, zoom, and many other ports are also due to it, mostly organisations whether they are commercial or educational, all are provide online facilities. A Number of younger people are willing to do everything in their safe situations. Moreover, everybody is so swamped with work and have lot to do in their plates do not get time to hangout with friends, and deemed social sites more convenient for meet and greet. Furthermore, I vividly remember that one of my cousins used to be at home alone as their parents were working at office. And she was given a computer and internet facilities at home so that she could study. Unfortunately, she got trapped into online friendship, where people make the most of innocent younger lives. In consequences, she had to face disgrace, and simultaneously, the loss of her study was another major jerk. In conclusion, I would say that everything has it is pros and cons. As social media has also. Youth needs to be explained the benefits of materialistic things as well as drawbacks of using online sites for the sake of self amusement.

Research This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
shows
 that a number of younger You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 social media platforms in order to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :attain
meet
 and greet privately
. The You use this word too often, consider replacing it withearthnature
world
 that is made
 by them are called
 virtual You use this word too often, consider replacing it withearthnature
world
. Yet
, there are certain ways to inspire them towards materialistic You use this word too often, consider replacing it withearthnature
world
. This essay is going to articulate the possible aspect of it along with my perception in upcoming paragraphs.

To embark on, in a modern era, as mostly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 prefer to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
live
 in nuclear families due to their working perspectives, and it could be the strong reason why their adolescents This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
 them introvert. For example
, according to the one news published by The Times Square 85 % parents are worked
 outside from dawn to dusk in order to give a better lifestyle to their children. Consequently
, they This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :depart
leave
 them at home, and in this way young children feel alone and do not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 time to go outside and would not able to This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.co-operatecooperate
co operate
 with outer You use this word too often, consider replacing it withearthnature
world
as a result
 they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
 finding virtual You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 whomever they could connect with. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Therefore,
Therefore
 it might be the reason behind why youth are getting much indulged in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwirednetworked
online
 society.

Furthermore
, as we know technology is burgeoning by leaps and bounds. Possible spelling mistake found.WhatsAppWhats app
Whatsapp
, zoom, and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 other ports are also
 due to it, mostly
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisations' is British English.organizations
organisations
 whether they are commercial or educational, all are Consider using a past participle here: "provided".provided
provide
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwirednetworked
online
 facilities. A Number of younger You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 are willing to do everything in their safe situations. Moreover
, everybody is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 swamped with work and have lot to do in their plates do not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 time The verb 'hang out' is spelled as two words. The noun 'hangout' is spelled as one.to hang out
to hangout
 with friends, and deemed social sites more convenient for This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :attain
meet
 and greet.

Furthermore
, I vividly
 remember that one of my cousins This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 to be at home alone as their parents were working at office. And she was This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 a computer and internet facilities at home This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 that she could study. Unfortunately, she This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
got
 trapped into You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwirednetworked
online
 friendship, where You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 the most of innocent younger This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
. In consequences, she had to face disgrace, and simultaneously
, the loss of her study was another major jerk.

In conclusion
, I would say that everything has it is pros and cons. As social media has also
. Youth needs to be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :interpreted
explained
 the benefits of materialistic things as well
 as drawbacks of using You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwirednetworked
online
 sites for the sake of self amusement. 