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reasons why people should not make noise as much as they want

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As well we know, noise makes everyone fell uncomfortable and angry. Therefore, I will tell you several reasons why people ought not to make noise as much as they want. In the first place, if you ignore people by the noise when they are working, they will fell extremely terrible and they can’t go on working. In addition, making noise makes you become a rude and impolite person, so everybody won’t get on well with you. The last point that can not be ignored is that making noise makes you not be respected and you can’t promoted in your career. There are some reasons which I want to share with all of you. To sum it up, we should be courtesy and polite or we can’t be appreciated.
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as much as they want. In the
first
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ignore
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when they are working, they will
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fell
extremely
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terrible and
they can’t go on working.
In addition
, making
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noise
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makes
you become a rude and impolite person,
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everybody won’t
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on well with you. The last point that can not be
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ignored
is that making
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noise
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makes
you not
be respected
and you can’t
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promoted
in your career. There are
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reasons which I want to share with all of you. To sum it up, we should be courtesy and
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polite or
we can’t
be appreciated
.

IELTS essay reasons why people should not make noise as much as they want

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
128 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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