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Radio and television audiences in UK throughout the day in 1992

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As one of the most popular tourist attractions, a lot of museums nowadays are charging an entrance fee for visitors, while others remain free of charge. While there are both advantages and disadvantages of applying an admission fee, I personally believe that the drawbacks outweigh the benefits. It is clear that the maintenance costs of a museum is incredibly high. One of the advantages of applying an entrance fee to the museum is that it can help the operator of the museum cover the costs to run the museum, such as water and electricity bills, personnel salary, and equipments. Another advantage is that the museum will have more income from the ticket revenue to improve the customer service and the facilities of the museum itself. For example, in my experience a museum that can decorate the exhibits and keep the place clean attracts more visitors than the one that cannot regardless of ticket price. A museum's main purpose is to educate visitors about things that are shown in the museum. By charging an entrance fee, it is harder for people to have access to such a vast amount of information, especially if the price is too high so that a lot of people cannot afford it. Most museums are also run by the government, so that it is financially supported by government funds. By having to pay for admissions, it discourages people to go to the museum. This can be seen from the fact that more people are spending their free time in public parks than in museum. In conclusion, an admission fee in a museum can be beneficial for the operator of the museum but there are a lot more drawbacks than benefits.
As one of the most popular tourist attractions,
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a lot of
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museums
nowadays are charging an entrance
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fee
for visitors, while others remain free of charge. While there are both advantages and disadvantages of applying an admission
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fee
, I
personally
believe that the drawbacks outweigh the benefits.

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clear
that the maintenance costs of a
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museum
is
incredibly
high. One of the advantages of applying an entrance
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fee
to the
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museum
is that it can
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help
the operator of the
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museum
cover the costs to run the
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museum
, such as water and electricity bills, personnel salary, and equipments. Another advantage is that the
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museum
will have more income from the ticket revenue to
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improve
the customer service and the facilities of the
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museum
itself.
For example
, in my experience a
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museum
that can decorate the exhibits and
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keep
the place clean attracts more visitors than the one that cannot regardless of ticket price.

A museum's main purpose is to educate visitors about things that
are shown
in the
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museum
. By charging an entrance
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fee
, it is harder for
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people
to have access to such a vast amount of information,
especially
if the price is too high
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so
that
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a lot of
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people
cannot afford it. Most
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museums
are
also
run by the
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government
,
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so
that it is
financially
supported by
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government
funds. By having to pay for admissions, it discourages
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people
to go to the
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museum
. This can be
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seen
from the fact that more
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people
are spending their free time in public parks than in museum.

In conclusion
, an admission
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fee
in a
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museum
can be beneficial for the operator of the
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museum
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but
there are a lot more drawbacks than benefits.
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IELTS essay Radio and television audiences in UK throughout the day in 1992

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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