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q3 The students discuss admission as an engineering major. State what the policy admission is and how one of the student was confused. v.1

q3 The students discuss admission as an engineering major. State what the policy admission is and how one of the student was confused. v. 1
IT IS BELIEVED THAT MUSIC IS AN EFFECTIVE WAY TO DEVELOP HARMONY AMONG HUMANS. HOWEVER, IN MY OPINION, I THINK THAT IN ADDITION TO MUSIC DEVELOPMENT IN TRANSPORT AND COMMUNICATION ALSO AIDS IN BRINGING PEOPLE TOGETHER FROM VARIOUS CULTURAL BACKGROUNDS AND FROM DIFFERENT AGE GROUPS. FIRSTLY, MUSIC IS ATTRACTIVE AND RELAXING TO ALL INDIVIDUALS. IF WE LISTEN TO THE BEATS OF MUSIC WE ATTEMPT TO LISTEN TO THE BEATS OF MUSIC OR TRY TO IMITATE THE LYRICS THUS WE FEEL RELAXED AND REFRESHED. MOREOVER, SOME TRADITIONAL MUSIC IS INTERNATIONALLY ACCEPTED AND IF IT PLAYED WIDELY IN DIFFERENT COUNTRIES, WHICH ALLOW THE EXCHANGE OF CULTURE AND TRADITIONS. FOR INSTANCE, FAMOUS MOVIE SONG NAMED JAIHO WRITTEN BY A. R. RAHMAN, IS WIDELY KNOWN BY ALMOST ALL NATIONALITIES AND THEY WATCH THE VIDEO OF THE SONG WHERE THE LOCAL INDIAN VILLAGES ARE PORTRAYED. ON THE CONTRARY, TRANSPORT AIDED IN BETTER TRADE IN WHICH PEOPLE TRAVELLED TO DIFFERENT DESTINATIONS AND SIMULTANEOUSLY PEOPLE BECOME CLOSER AND CULTURAL TIES ARE LESS. THIS ENCOURAGES PEOPLE OF DIFFERENT CULTURAL BACKGROUND TO COME CLOSER FOR STRONG RELATIONSHIPS. FURTHERMORE, COMMUNICATION PLAYS A VITAL ROLE IN THE HARMONIOUS RELATIONSHIP BETWEEN PEOPLE OF DIFFERENT CULTURES AND AGES. WITH THE HELP OF GLOBAL LANGUAGE THE COMMUNICATION IS EASIER AND EXCHANGE OF IDEAS AND UNDERSTANDING ARE FASTER. NOW PEOPLE CAN TRAVEL TO DIFFERENT PARTS OF THE WORLD NO BARRIERS IN LANGUAGE DUE TO THE TECHNOLOGICAL DEVELOPMENTS. FOR INSTANCE MOBILE PHONES AND SOCIAL CHATTING SITES ETC. TO SUM UP EVENTHOUGH MUSIC IS CONSIDERED AN EFFECTIVE WAY TO BRING PEOPLE TOGETHER, WITH ADVANCED TRANSPORT AND COMMUNICATION FACILITIES THE WORLD IS BECOMING CLOSER AND CULTURAL AND OTHER BARRIERS ARE REDUCING ON A DAY TO DAY BASIS.
IT
IS BELIEVED
THAT
MUSIC
IS AN EFFECTIVE WAY TO DEVELOP HARMONY AMONG HUMANS.
HOWEVER
, IN MY OPINION, I
THINK
THAT
IN ADDITION
TO
MUSIC
DEVELOPMENT IN TRANSPORT AND
COMMUNICATION
ALSO
AIDS IN BRINGING
PEOPLE
TOGETHER FROM VARIOUS
CULTURAL
BACKGROUNDS AND FROM
DIFFERENT
AGE GROUPS.

FIRSTLY
,
MUSIC
IS ATTRACTIVE AND RELAXING TO ALL INDIVIDUALS. IF WE LISTEN TO THE BEATS OF
MUSIC
WE ATTEMPT TO LISTEN TO THE BEATS OF
MUSIC
OR TRY TO IMITATE THE LYRICS
THUS
WE FEEL RELAXED AND REFRESHED.
MOREOVER
,
SOME
TRADITIONAL
MUSIC
IS
INTERNATIONALLY
ACCEPTED
AND IF IT PLAYED
WIDELY
IN
DIFFERENT
COUNTRIES, WHICH
ALLOW
THE EXCHANGE OF CULTURE AND TRADITIONS.
FOR INSTANCE
,
FAMOUS
MOVIE SONG NAMED
JAIHO
WRITTEN BY A. R. RAHMAN, IS
WIDELY
KNOWN BY ALMOST ALL NATIONALITIES AND THEY
WATCH
THE VIDEO OF THE SONG WHERE THE LOCAL INDIAN VILLAGES
ARE PORTRAYED
.

ON THE CONTRARY
, TRANSPORT AIDED IN BETTER TRADE IN WHICH
PEOPLE
TRAVELLED TO
DIFFERENT
DESTINATIONS AND
SIMULTANEOUSLY
PEOPLE
BECOME CLOSER AND
CULTURAL
TIES ARE LESS. THIS ENCOURAGES
PEOPLE
OF
DIFFERENT
CULTURAL
BACKGROUND TO
COME
CLOSER FOR STRONG RELATIONSHIPS.

FURTHERMORE
,
COMMUNICATION
PLAYS A VITAL ROLE IN THE HARMONIOUS RELATIONSHIP BETWEEN
PEOPLE
OF
DIFFERENT
CULTURES AND AGES. WITH THE
HELP
OF GLOBAL LANGUAGE THE
COMMUNICATION
IS EASIER AND EXCHANGE OF
IDEAS
AND UNDERSTANDING ARE FASTER.
NOW
PEOPLE
CAN TRAVEL TO
DIFFERENT
PARTS OF THE WORLD NO BARRIERS IN LANGUAGE DUE TO THE TECHNOLOGICAL DEVELOPMENTS.
FOR INSTANCE
MOBILE PHONES AND SOCIAL CHATTING SITES ETC.

TO SUM UP
EVENTHOUGH
MUSIC
IS CONSIDERED
AN EFFECTIVE WAY TO BRING
PEOPLE
TOGETHER, WITH ADVANCED TRANSPORT AND
COMMUNICATION
FACILITIES THE WORLD IS BECOMING CLOSER AND
CULTURAL
AND OTHER BARRIERS ARE REDUCING ON A
DAY TO DAY
BASIS.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay q3 The students discuss admission as an engineering major. State what the policy admission is and how one of the student was confused. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
279 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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