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Q2 Do you make decisions quickly or take your time making them? Use details and examples to support your response. v.1

Q2 Do you make decisions quickly or take your time making them? Use details and examples to support your response. v. 1
There has been tremendous growth of entertainment media over the last few years. Media influenced numerous people and it becomes an essential part of their life. Some people argue that media is spoiling youngster badly due to the severe violence that is being used in TV programmes and films. However, others state that it keeps us updated with the latest news and a source of entertainment for many. I strongly believe that media has undeniable benefits on people's lives. Media play a vital role in easing our stress and tension. Nowadays people are busy in their hectic routine work, they get very less time for recreational activities. Movies and television provide good sources of entertainment and help us to become refreshed and informed, relaxed and energetic in our future work. In addition to this television also provide news and other informative programs which create awareness and enhance our knowledge. However, youngsters are negatively affected by the violence and aggression shown in movies and dramas. They have become less patience and more susceptible to violence. This has also increased the crime rate in the society. People want to act like their favourite celebrity in real life, which cause many problems. For Instance, people start fighting over a small dispute which could turn into a battlefield on a later stage. Fashion and style that youngsters often follow because of their favourite actor or actress are often unacceptable in many societies. In conclusion, I believe that we should use media as a fun activity rather than highlight its negative aspects. It
There has been tremendous growth of entertainment
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media
over the last few years.
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Media
influenced numerous
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people
and it becomes an essential part of their life.
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Some
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people
argue that
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media
is spoiling youngster
badly
due to the severe violence
that is
being
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used
in TV
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programmes
and films.
However
, others state that it
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keeps
us updated with the latest news and a source of entertainment for
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many
. I
strongly
believe that
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media
has undeniable benefits on
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people
's
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lives
.

Media play a vital role in easing our
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stress
and tension. Nowadays
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people
are busy in their hectic routine work, they
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get
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very
less time for recreational activities. Movies and television provide
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good
sources of entertainment and
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help
us to become refreshed and informed, relaxed and energetic in our future work.
In addition
to this television
also
provide news and other informative programs which create awareness and enhance our knowledge.

However
, youngsters are
negatively
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affected
by the violence and aggression shown in movies and dramas. They have become less patience and more susceptible to violence. This has
also
increased the crime rate in the society.
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People
want to act like their
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favourite
celebrity in real life, which cause
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many
problems.
For Instance
,
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
fighting over a
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small
dispute which could turn into a battlefield on a later stage. Fashion and style that youngsters
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often
follow
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because
of their
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favourite
actor or actress are
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often
unacceptable in
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many
societies.

In conclusion
, I believe that we should
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use
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media
as a fun activity
rather
than highlight its
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negative
aspects. It
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Q2 Do you make decisions quickly or take your time making them? Use details and examples to support your response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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