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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. qrQ5
Gone are the days where people used to work in a single career to earn money. Recent trends suggests that people are more interested in choosing different career options to earn money and being educated throughout their life. In this essay I will explain why having many career options will help an individual and how an individual must keep on learning throughout his life. There are many advancements in the society and in the same way, the workforce has also changed. There are many new positions in the work environment which did not exist a decade ago. If a person is stuck to a single career and he does not try to learn new things, he cannot cope up with the current changes in the market. With the current technological improvements in the modern day life, the day-to-day living expenses also increased. My uncle used to be a "C program developer". At one time, software applications were developed using this technology. His salary used to be good and he was so comfortable in that position and did not think of learning any other technologies. However, there are new technologies for designing applications and the software companies migrated to those technologies and hired new people who are skilled in those technologies leaving these people behind. This example tells us that we need to keep on learning throughout life as new things emerge. In conclusion, I would like to say that an individual must not depend on a single career choice and have to keep their options open. He should also keep on educating himself on the current improvements in the industry and stay up to date. In the current scenario, where there are many inventions taking place and increasing modern day living expenses, it is necessary to keep on educating and switching careers in order to survive.
Gone
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days where
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people
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used
to work in a single
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career
to earn money. Recent trends suggests that
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people
are more interested in choosing
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different
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career
options to earn money and
being educated
throughout their life. In this essay I will
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explain
why having
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many
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career
options will
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help
an individual and how an individual
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must
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keep
on learning throughout his life.

There are
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many
advancements in the society and
in the same way
, the workforce has
also
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changed
. There are
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many
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new
positions in the work environment which did not exist a decade ago. If a person
is stuck
to a single
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career and
he does not try to learn
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new
things, he cannot cope up with the
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current
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changes
in the market. With the
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current
technological improvements in the modern day life, the day-to-day living expenses
also
increased.

My uncle
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used
to be a
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"
C program developer
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"
. At one time, software applications
were developed
using this
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technology
. His salary
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used
to be
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good and
he was
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so
comfortable in that position and did not
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think
of learning any other technologies.

However
, there are
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new
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technologies
for designing applications and the software
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companies
migrated to those
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technologies
and hired
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new
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people
who
are skilled
in those
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technologies
leaving these
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people
behind. This example
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tells
us that we need to
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keep
on learning throughout life as
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new
things emerge.

In conclusion
, I would like to say that an individual
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must
not depend on a single
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career
choice and
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have to
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keep
their options open. He should
also
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keep
on educating himself on the
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current
improvements in the industry and stay up to date. In the
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current
scenario, where there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
inventions taking place and increasing modern day living expenses, it is necessary to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
keep
on educating and switching
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
careers
in order to survive.
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IELTS essay Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
306 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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