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Population growth on the earth

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In most countries of the world, the population is increasing alarmingly. This is especially true in poor, undeveloped countries. Overpopulation causes a considerable number of problems. As it is the resources there are limited and the ever-increasing population just makes it worse. In poor countries it is difficult to provide enough food to feed even the present number of people. In addition, education to limit the number of children per family is not always successful. Poorer countries usually have a lot of unemployment too, and an increase in population simply makes the situation worse. The environment also suffers when there are too many people living on the land. In rich, industrialized and developing countries it is very difficult for governments to provide effective public services in overcrowded cities. Moreover, there is usually a great deal more crime, which is often due to high rates of unemployment. Further large increases in population only cause more overcrowding, unemployment and crime. The human population explosion not only affects humans but also our environment and wildlife. We have seen so many species of birds and animals go extinct because of various factors. As more population requires more resources deforestation is happening at a faster rate which takes away the homes of these animals. Similarly, their habitat is being destroyed owing to human activities. Next, pollution levels are on the rise because of the population explosion. Every person generates solid or air pollution while consuming natural resources. Our climate is also facing drastic changes because of human activities. It is impacting our lives very harmfully and must be monitored now. Global warming which occurs mostly due to activities by humans is one of the factors for climate change. The best. approach would be to work by persuasion rather than compulsion This could be done by a process of education that points out the way a smaller family can mean an improved quality of life for the family members, as well as less strain on the country’s perhaps very limited, resources Second every woman who is pregnant, but who does not want to give birth, should be allowed by law to have an abortion. Third, small family shall be given some government incentive or other child – benefit payment to control the population. To sum up, If the population rates continue to rise at this rate, then we won’t be able to survive for long. As with this population growth comes harmful consequences. Therefore, we must take measures to control the population
In most
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countries
of the world, the
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population
is increasing
alarmingly
. This is
especially
true in poor, undeveloped
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countries
. Overpopulation causes a considerable number of problems. As it is the resources there
are limited
and the ever-increasing
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population
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just
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makes
it worse.

In poor
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countries
it is difficult to provide
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enough
food to feed even the present number of
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people
.
In addition
, education to limit the number of children per
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family
is not always successful. Poorer
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countries
usually
have
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a lot of
unemployment too, and an increase in
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population
simply
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makes
the situation worse. The environment
also
suffers when there are too
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many
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people
living on the land. In rich, industrialized and developing
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countries
it is
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very
difficult for
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governments
to provide effective public services in overcrowded cities.
Moreover
, there is
usually
a great deal more crime, which is
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often
due to high
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rates
of unemployment.
Further
large increases in
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population
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only
cause more overcrowding, unemployment and crime.

The
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human
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population
explosion not
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only
affects
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humans
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but
also
our environment and wildlife. We have
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seen
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so
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many
species of birds and animals go extinct
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because
of various factors.
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As
more
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population
requires more
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resources
deforestation is happening at a faster
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rate
which takes away the homes of these animals.
Similarly
, their habitat is being
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destroyed
owing to
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human
activities.

Next
, pollution levels are on the rise
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because
of the
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population
explosion. Every person generates solid or air pollution while consuming natural resources. Our climate is
also
facing drastic
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changes
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because
of
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human
activities. It is impacting our
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lives
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very
harmfully
and
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must
be monitored
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now
. Global warming which occurs
mostly
due to activities by
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humans
is one of the factors for climate
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change
.

The best.
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approach
would be to work by persuasion
rather
than compulsion This could
be done
by a process of education that points out the way a smaller
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family
can mean an
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improved
quality of life for the
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family
members,
as well
as less strain on the
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country’s
perhaps
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very
limited, resources

Second every woman who is pregnant,
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but
who does not want to give birth, should be
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allowed
by law to have an abortion. Third,
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small
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family
shall be
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given
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some
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government
incentive or other child
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–
benefit payment to control the population.

To sum up, If the
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population
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rates
continue to rise at this
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rate
, then we won’t be able to survive for long.
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As
with this
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population
growth
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comes
harmful consequences.
Therefore
, we
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must
take measures to control the
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population
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IELTS essay Population growth on the earth

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
415 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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