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poor students or students who come from rural areas often find it difficult to have access to university education. Some people think universities should make it especially easy for them to study. To what extent do yo agree or disagree

poor students or students who come from rural areas often find it difficult to have access to university education. Some people think universities should make it especially easy for them to study. To what extent do yo agree or disagree kqKn
7 We live in the time where education is an access to have a better future. Unfortunately, the higher the education level is, it will be more difficult as well to be reached, especially for disadvantage student. In my opinion, the institution of education should be proactive in approaching student with low economy life, accompanied with other related party. It is commonly known that students who come from countryside are unlimited in connection to information, including education. Moreover, universities seems to be very far to be studied at. Fancy institutions mostly are centralized in suburban area where everything is accessible. For example, most Ivy League school are headquartered in New Jersey and New York, United States. In the same way, rural area mostly are not equipped with developed infrastructure to connect the area with information. Thus, universities, which have the prerogative in admittance procedure, should consider to put up more accessible way for them. On the other hand, it is not only the job of the university to simplify the access for student. First, government should be aware that infrastructure building is necessary for student to access information of further education. Second, early school could take the part on building a sustainable proactive culture for student in gaining information. It is also important to prepare the student that competition in university is hard academically and socially. Hence, all parties are needed essentially in building fair access for all student. In summary, student who are not living in metropolitan city should have an accessible way to possess higher education, but it does not always have to be easy. I strongly believe that fair access for all student eventually will bring more impact for a better generation than merely a simple way.
7 We
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live
in the
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time where
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education
is an
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access
to have a better future. Unfortunately, the higher the
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education
level is, it will be more difficult
as well
to
be reached
,
especially
for disadvantage
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student
. In my opinion, the institution of
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education
should be proactive in approaching
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student
with low economy life,
The usual collocation for "accompany" is "by," not "with." It is better to say this: "accompanied by".
accompanied with
other related party.

It is
commonly
known that
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students
who
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come
from countryside
are unlimited
in connection to
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information
, including
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education
.
Moreover
,
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universities
seems to be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
far to
be studied
at. Fancy institutions
mostly
are centralized
in suburban area where everything is accessible.
For example
, most Ivy League school
are headquartered
in New Jersey and New York, United States.
In the same way
, rural area
mostly
are not equipped with developed infrastructure to connect the area with
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information
.
Thus
,
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universities
, which have the prerogative in admittance procedure, should
The verb 'consider' is used with the gerund form: "consider putting".
consider to put
up more accessible way for them.

On the other hand
, it is not
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only
the job of the
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university
to simplify the
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access
for
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student
.
First
,
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government
should be aware that infrastructure building is necessary for
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student
to
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access
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information
of
further
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education
. Second, early school could take the part on building a sustainable proactive culture for
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student
in gaining
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information
. It is
also
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important
to prepare the
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student
that competition in
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university
is
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hard
academically
and
socially
.
Hence
, all parties
are needed
essentially
in building
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fair
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access
for all student.

In summary,
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student
who are not living in metropolitan city should have an accessible way to possess higher
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education
,
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but
it does not always
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have to
be easy. I
strongly
believe that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fair
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
access
for all
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student
eventually
will bring more impact for a better generation than
merely
a simple way.
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IELTS essay poor students or students who come from rural areas often find it difficult to have access to university education. Some people think universities should make it especially easy for them to study. To what extent do yo agree or disagree

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