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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. What are the possible causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have on animal life and human society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. What are the possible causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have on animal life and human society? qVRaa
Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern because there will be a lot of scarcity of fresh water in future because of these pollutions and this effects severely on animal life and human society. There are many causes of water pollution and main cause among all is industriliazation and this causes a lot of pollutants to release from industries to fresh water resources. Industries will use lots of chemicals and use water for their purposes and release those waters into nearest water bodies without removing pollutants. So this causes pollution of fresh water and also affects the livelihood of animals and human society living nearby industries. Becuase of scarcity of fresh water normal people need to travel long distances for fresh water and people were involving their children also and this is affecting those children's education because these children travels for water and wont get a chance to educate themselves. And in urban areas people are throwing waste in waters bodies and it is polluting water and also usage of plastic is polluting ground water. And due to usage of different kinds of fuels air is polluting and due to heavy air pollution these polluted dust particles are going into water bodies therefore causing water pollution. This leads to scarcity of fresh water for drinking and also farmers wont be able to use this kind of polluted water to irrigation and agriculture and this leads to scarcity of food for animals also and this leads to scarvity of milk products of human society. Conclusively everything is interlinked, if some thing disturbs whole food chain will get disturb.
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of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern
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because
there will be
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scarcity
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fresh
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water
in future
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because
of these
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pollutions
and this effects
severely
on animal life and human society.

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many
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causes
of
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water
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pollution
and main
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cause
among all is
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industriliazation
and this
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causes
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a lot of
pollutants to release from industries to
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fresh
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water
resources. Industries will
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use
lots of chemicals and
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use
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water
for their purposes and release those
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waters
into
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nearest
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water
bodies without removing pollutants.
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causes
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pollution
of
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fresh
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water
and
also
affects the livelihood of animals and human society living nearby industries.

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of
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scarcity
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fresh
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water
normal
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people
need to travel long distances for
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fresh
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water
and
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people
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were involving
their children
also
and this is affecting those children's education
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because
these children travels for
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water
and
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wont
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get
a chance to educate themselves.

And in urban areas
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people
are throwing waste in
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waters
bodies and it is polluting
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water
and
also
usage of plastic is polluting ground
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water
. And due to usage of
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different
kinds of fuels air is polluting and due to heavy air
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pollution
these polluted dust particles are going into
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water
bodies
therefore
causing
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water
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pollution
. This leads to
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scarcity
of
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fresh
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water
for drinking and
also
farmers
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wont
be able to
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use
this kind of polluted
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water
to irrigation and agriculture and this leads to
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scarcity
of food for animals
also
and this leads to
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scarvity
of milk products of human society.

Conclusively
everything
is interlinked
, if
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some thing
disturbs whole food chain will
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get
disturb.
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IELTS essay Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. What are the possible causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have on animal life and human society?

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  American English
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270 words
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