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Playing computer games is bad for children Or it is positive on the way children develop. discuus both sides and give your opinion ?

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The modern world is booming towards the way of progression on the contrary computer games very popular among children, in which mosty masses believe that playing games on copmuter effects the teenagers development which was always a debatable issue and has now become controversial with plethora of masses claiming that is hazardous while opponents reject this notion. The substantial influence of this trend has sparked the controversy over the potential impact in recent years. This essay will further elaborate both effect of this trend and thus will lead to a logical conclusion. Predominately, analysis the statementand further explaining further the first and foremost reason behind this is that playing games on computers are harmful for children. Moreover, if children play most time on electronic games which can effect their eyes and they became very obeses due to the effect they dont spend time on outdoors games, Although, it also effect their studies they do not proper focus on education and they do not spend time with their freinds and families. Furthermore, it is also adverse for their lifestyles and children also addicted for computers games. For an instance a survey was conducted in 2017 by oxford university is that 80% of children who use internet for playing games which adverse effected of their eyes that children wears specks. In contrast, there are many pitfalls that negate these arguments and which can certainly overwhelm the potential influence of this trend bu the most alarming one is that, playing computer games is advantageous for children. However, video games also introduce to children new technology and beneficial to improve their motor skill and some games provide practice in problem solving and logic. Therefore, children who play video games have better reflexes and they also learn funs and joys. thus, its is also beneficical for parents who are busy their work and they do not spend much time to their children but only if they are limited time. Hence, nowdays children do study online which can make good in their studies. To conclude, according to aforementioned above, one can reach to a conlusion that the merits of playing games on internet are instumental indeed. Neverthelses potential drawbacks should not be overlooked either.
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on the contrary
computer
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games
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very
popular among
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children
, in which
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mosty
masses believe that
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playing
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games
on
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copmuter
effects the
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development which was always a debatable issue and has
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now
become controversial with plethora of masses claiming
that is
hazardous while opponents reject this notion. The substantial influence of this trend has sparked the controversy over the potential impact in recent years. This essay will
further
elaborate both
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effect
of this trend and
thus
will lead to a logical conclusion.

Predominately
, analysis the
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statementand
further
explaining
further
the
first
and foremost reason behind this is that
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playing
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games
on computers are harmful for
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children
.
Moreover
, if
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children
play most
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time
on electronic
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games
which can
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effect
their
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eyes and
they became
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very
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obeses
due to the
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effect
they
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dont
spend
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time
on outdoors
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games
, Although, it
also
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effect
their studies they do not proper focus on
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education and
they do not spend
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time
with their
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freinds
and families.
Furthermore
, it is
also
adverse for their lifestyles and
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children
also
addicted for computers
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games
. For an instance a survey
was conducted
in 2017 by oxford university is that 80% of
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children
who
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use
internet for
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playing
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games
which adverse effected of their eyes that
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children
wears specks.

In contrast
, there are
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many
pitfalls that negate these arguments and which can
certainly
overwhelm the potential influence of this trend
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bu
the most alarming one is that,
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playing
computer
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games
is advantageous for
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children
.
However
, video
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games
also
introduce to
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children
new technology and beneficial to
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improve
their motor
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skill
and
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some
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games
provide practice in problem solving and logic.
Therefore
,
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children
who play video
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games
have better
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reflexes and
they
also
learn
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funs
and joys.
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thus
, its is
also
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beneficical
for parents who are busy their
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work and
they do not spend much
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time
to their
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children
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but
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only
if they
are limited
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time
.
Hence
,
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nowdays
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children
do study online which can
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make
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good
in their studies.
To conclude
, according to aforementioned above, one can reach to a
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conlusion
that the merits of
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playing
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games
on internet are
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instumental
indeed
.
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Neverthelses
potential drawbacks should not
be overlooked
either.
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IELTS essay Playing computer games is bad for children Or it is positive on the way children develop. discuus both sides and give your opinion?

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