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personal statement for university admission

personal statement for university admission xx3q9

From a young age, I was interested in many things. I was a curious kid. Toys are made for me to open up and see. Sometimes I would get scolded by my father because it's not always that I would put it back together to the way it used to be intermittently I did not know how to put it back together. Everything that came on my way I would always have a question for it. And these questions would find their way to either my father or my teachers most of the time. My curiosity behavior was encouraged by my father. He is the one who taught me everything I know. Even though he passed away when I was young he has big influence on who I am today. He taught me to be considerate, brave, and kind. He is my hero and role model. My father bought us our first computer when I was just eight years old. My little brain then was just happy to play games, but as I grew I started becoming curious about how the games were made, displayed, and how we could control them. When I became the 11th grader I was introduced to my first c++ class. I loved the feeling I got as I programmed and saw the program working. I have always been a problem solver. I inherited it from my father, there was nothing that my father could not fix, and since my mother passed away when I was five it was just him and I. I would always follow him around and watch what he is doing, go to work with him sometimes, by eleven I started fixing things by myself.

From a young age, I was interested
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many
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 for me to open up and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :in some instances
Sometimes
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get
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father
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 it's not always that I would put it back together to the way it This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 to be intermittently
 I did not know how to put it back together. Everything that came on my way I would always have a question for it. And these questions would find their way to either my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdadpredecessorancestorparent
father
 or my teachers most of the time. My curiosity behavior was encouraged
 by my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdadpredecessorancestorparent
father
. He is the one who taught me everything I know. Even though
 he passed away when I was young he has This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:hugeenormousgiganticvast
big
 influence on who I am This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :this day and agenowadays
today
. He taught me to be considerate, brave, and kind. He is my hero and role model. My You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdadpredecessorancestorparent
father
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchased
bought
 us our first
 computer when I was This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 eight years This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
. My This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
little
 brain then was This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 happy to play games, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 as I grew I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 becoming curious about how the games were made
, displayed, and how we could control them. “When” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
When
 I became the 11th grader I was introduced
 to my first
 c++ This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
. I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :admiredadored
loved
 the feeling I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
got
 as I programmed and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
saw
 the program working. I have always been a problem solver. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 inherited it from my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdadpredecessorancestorparent
father
, there was nothing that my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdadpredecessorancestorparent
father
 could not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :rectify
fix
, and since my mother passed away when I was five it was This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 him and I. I would always follow him around and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :monitor
watch
 what he is doing, go to work with him This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :in some instances
sometimes
, by eleven I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 fixing things by myself. 