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People think that success comes through hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.

People think that success comes through hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success. doD5P
Nothing comes by chance. All that we achieve is through hard work, perseverance and persistance. Some people think that something they got was by lucky. And, I can say that they are wrong. In my opinion if we want to succeed in life we need to have a plan and start working on it. Firstly, being successful in life requires long hours of work. We have to work properly to accomplish any task. We cannot only stand sitting and wait untill something good happens because it will not come till further actions. For instance, a student needs to study hard to enter in a very famous university. It is quite impossible to pass the test without any preparation. I had to spend long hours studying for the test sometimes even not being able to stop for a dinner or any other break. Fortunately, afterwords, I was adimitted in a university. Secondly, as it is stated in science, there are some sort of attractions in our lives. While we are working, those attractions combine to each other in order to help us. This means that luck is not related to success. However, there are some circumstances when we feel that luck is presented. I remember when my math teacher took a test to get a job at university. He had been studying a specific book about rockets. When he took the test he realized that every questions he had been studying so far were in the test. Therefore, he was selected to work for the university. Finally, if we want to achieve success, we should do it so only through hard work because luck is not a matter for it.
Nothing
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comes
by chance. All that we achieve is through
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hard
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work
, perseverance and
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persistance
.
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Some
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people
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think
that something they
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got
was by lucky. And, I can say that they are
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wrong
. In my opinion if we want to succeed in life we need to have a plan and
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start
working on it.

Firstly
, being successful in life requires long hours of
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work
. We
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have to
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work
properly
to accomplish any task. We cannot
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only
stand sitting and wait
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untill
something
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good
happens
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because
it will not
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come
till
further
actions.
For instance
, a student needs to study
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hard
to enter in a
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very
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famous
university. It is quite impossible to pass the
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test
without any preparation. I had to spend long hours studying for the
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test
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sometimes
even not being able to
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stop
for a dinner or any other break.
Fortunately
, afterwords, I was
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adimitted
in a university.

Secondly
, as it
is stated
in science, there are
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some
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sort
of attractions in our
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lives
. While we are working, those attractions combine to each other in order to
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help
us. This means that luck is not related to success.

However
, there are
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some
circumstances when we feel that luck
is presented
. I remember when my math teacher took a
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test
to
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get
a job at university. He had been studying a specific book about rockets.
“When” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
When
he took the
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test
he realized that every
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questions
he had been studying
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so
far were in the
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test
.
Therefore
, he
was selected
to
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work
for the university.

Finally
, if we want to achieve success, we should do it
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so
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only
through
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hard
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work
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because
luck is not a matter for it.
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IELTS essay People think that success comes through hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
279 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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