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People surrounded by advertising. Which had an increasing effects on our lives. Do you think the positive effect of this outweigh the negative effects?

People surrounded by advertising. Which had an increasing effects on our lives. Do you think the positive effect of this outweigh the negative effects? VBl1D
Every product around us is a result of its advertising. Firstly advertising helps their product devlopers to reach their product in remote areas. As a result the sale of product may rise and creat postive impact in company's growth. Secondly advertising enrich customs to make decision about better products. Which helps customer to realised the the true value of their well earned money. Lastly advertising industry creats a lot of jobs and boost the country's economy. For example we have started our photo studio's advertising in various government and private organisations. Which helps us to creat new customers and enhance our financial growth.
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product
around us is a result of its advertising.
Firstly
advertising
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helps
their
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product
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devlopers
to reach their
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product
in remote areas.
As a result
the sale of
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product
may rise and
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creat
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postive
impact in
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company
's growth.
Secondly
advertising enrich customs to
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make
decision about better
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products
.
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Which
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helps
customer
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to realised
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the the
true value of their
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well earned
money.
Lastly
advertising industry
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creats
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a lot of
jobs and boost the country's economy. For
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example we
have
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started
our photo studio's advertising in various
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government
and private
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organisations
. Which
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helps
us to
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creat
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IELTS essay People surrounded by advertising. Which had an increasing effects on our lives. Do you think the positive effect of this outweigh the negative effects?

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