Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

We can not help everyone in the world that needs help , so we should onlybe concerned with our own communities and countries.

We can not help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should onlybe concerned with our own communities and countries. 563je
Some people argue that we need to focus on an effect to make our own communities and countries better rather than try to help the whole world. I personally disagree with the statement that we should not be interested in other countries difficulties and this essay analayzes my viewpoint. Firstly, every nation today is independent on each other. Though, some nations are welthier than others or require their basic needs for food, clothing and shelter to be fulfilled. According to me, countries that are well to do can help poorer countries to overcome their poverty. For example, some developing nations that had faced natural disaster require financial help to rais their economy. This is possible when another country is willing to do so. This not only provides support to affected country but also helps to improve international relationship. Furthermore, many countries might face some problems based on economic development. Especially, India confronts troubles of unemployment. Other developed nations can resolve this problem by providing job opportunity to the immigrants. These can be achieved in their country to be served by some skilful and knowledgeable individuals which affects the economic improvement of the country. To conclude, I believe that everyone in the world is capable of helping others by some way or the other. Therefore, the statement about concerning with only own community and country is questionable.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
argue that we need to focus on an effect to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
communities and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
better
rather
than try to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
the whole world. I
personally
disagree with the statement that we should not
be interested
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
difficulties and this essay
Possible spelling mistake found.
analayzes
my viewpoint.
Firstly
, every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nation
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
is independent on each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
. Though,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
are
Possible spelling mistake found.
welthier
than others or require their basic needs for food, clothing and shelter to
be fulfilled
.
This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using "in my opinion" or "I think".
According to me
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
that are
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well to do
can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
poorer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
to overcome their poverty.
For example
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
developing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
that had faced natural disaster require financial
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
to
Possible spelling mistake found.
rais
their economy. This is possible when another
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
is willing to do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
. This not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
provides support to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
helps
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
international relationship.
Furthermore
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
might face
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
problems based on economic development.
Especially
, India confronts troubles of unemployment.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Other
developed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
can resolve this problem by providing job opportunity to the immigrants. These can
be achieved
in their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
to
be served
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
Possible spelling mistake. 'skilful' is British English.
skilful
and knowledgeable individuals which affects the economic improvement of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
.
To conclude
, I believe that everyone in the world is capable of helping others by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
way or the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
.
Therefore
, the statement about concerning with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
community and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
is questionable.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay We can not help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should onlybe concerned with our own communities and countries.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
226 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts