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people spend a lot of time on their devices on their phones and other devices

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mentality of users. Nellie Bowles discusses Mr.
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and how he made a book based on the
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IELTS essay people spend a lot of time on their devices on their phones and other devices

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
219 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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