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People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Recently, meat consumption has become more popular among people over the world. Breeding animals for consuming is cruel, so people do not have to add meat to their daily diet. I completely disagree with this fact that people should be able to eat meat almost every day. Availability of taking great source of Vitamins as well as providing throughout the world with meat despite over consuming in a daily life will prove my standpoint. To begin, farmers raise animals for consuming and it is not cruel. It is because, there is not a limited measure of consumed animals like cows and sheep. In other words, in the developing world the demand for eating meat is undergoing a sharp rise among individuals day by day, so farmers never stop to breed animals that are validity for consumption. As a result, these types of animals will not be terminated or endangered instead they will be increased. In addition, of course endangered animals like lion, giraffe and crocodile are not eaten by individuals. Therefore, consuming animals and breeding them for eating may not be cruel. On the other hand, people can get a lot of needful vitamins, ingredients and even calcium from meat. What it means, humans should eat meat for being healthy because these kinds of vitamins and calcium help to build strong bones and skeleton. Although these kinds of vitamins can be founded from only meat in organic way, there are some drugs which can replace meat but drug over consuming badly effects to liver. If individuals do not eat meat regularly, people might have a tendency to be vulnerable. Thus, government should encourage animal farming. To conclude, of course meat over consuming can be cruel but I believe that individuals should be able to eat meat for being healthy and taking needful ingredients.
Recently,
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consumption has become more popular among
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people
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over
the world. Breeding
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animals
for consuming is cruel,
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people
do not
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have to
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add
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meat
to their daily diet. I completely disagree with this fact that
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people
should be able to
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eat
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meat
almost every day. Availability of taking great source of
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Vitamins
as well
as providing throughout the world with
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meat
despite
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over
consuming in a daily life will prove my standpoint.

To
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begin
, farmers raise
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animals
for consuming and it is not cruel. It is
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because
, there is not a limited measure of consumed
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animals
like cows and sheep.
In other words
, in the developing world the demand for eating
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meat
is undergoing a sharp rise among
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individuals
day by day,
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so
farmers never
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stop
to breed
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animals
that are validity for consumption.
As a result
, these types of
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animals
will not
be terminated
or endangered
instead
they will
be increased
.
In addition
,
of course
endangered
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animals
like lion, giraffe and crocodile are not eaten by
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individuals
.
Therefore
, consuming
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animals
and breeding them for eating may not be cruel.

On the other hand
,
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people
can
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get
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a lot of
needful
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vitamins
, ingredients and even calcium from
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meat
. What it means, humans should
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eat
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meat
for being healthy
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because
these kinds of
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vitamins
and calcium
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help
to build strong bones and skeleton. Although these kinds of
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vitamins
can
be founded
from
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only
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meat
in organic way, there are
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some
drugs which can replace
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meat
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but
drug
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over
consuming
badly
effects to liver. If
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individuals
do not
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eat
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meat
regularly
,
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people
might have a tendency to be vulnerable.
Thus
,
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government
should encourage
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animal
farming.

To conclude
,
of course
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meat
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over
consuming can be cruel
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but
I believe that
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individuals
should be able to
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eat
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meat
for being healthy and taking needful ingredients.
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IELTS essay People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel. with this opinion?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
6.5
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