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People of different cultures change their way of looking by changing hair color, cosmetics, jewellery. surgery why do you think people do this. is it good to do

People of different cultures change their way of looking by changing hair color, cosmetics, jewellery. surgery why do you think people do this. is it good to do qV1rp
Due to modernization, people from all over the world, are diverting their lifestyle from simplicity towards luxury and western appearance. This is due to the fact that they try to adopt modern lifestyle, gain popularity and beatify their look. In this essay, I will contend these reasons in more detail and elaborate its positive and negative consequences. Firstly, change in look has become a symbol of rich and luxurious lifestyle. For example, in every country and culture, women, who are wearing expensive jewellery and clothes, often recognized as rich personalities of the society as compar. . .
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people
from all over the world, are diverting their lifestyle from simplicity towards luxury and western appearance.
This is due to the fact that
they try to adopt modern lifestyle, gain popularity and beatify their look. In this essay, I will contend these reasons in more detail and elaborate its
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positive
and
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consequences.

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change
in look has become a symbol of rich and luxurious lifestyle.
For example
, in every country and culture, women, who are wearing expensive
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jewellery
and clothes,
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often
recognized as rich personalities of the society as
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compar
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IELTS essay People of different cultures change their way of looking by changing hair color, cosmetics, jewellery. surgery why do you think people do this. is it good to do

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
97 words
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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