Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

People have different views about a healthy meal for children should be offered at school or at home.

People have different views about a healthy meal for children should be offered at school or at home. m80X1
People have different views about a healthy meal for children should be offered at school or at home. While some people assume that schools will be the best option for encouraging children to have a healthy diet, I still believe that parents are a more significant factor to help children improve diets. There are some reasons why schools play a crucial part in helping children familiarize themselves with healthy diets. To begin with, children don’t have any selection of dishes that they eat in schools since they have to eat following the school’s menu. Therefore, should the school implement healthier foods during the school meals, children might be more inclined to try and accept them. Moreover, educational officials can capitalize on peer influence to promote good eating habits due to the fact that children tend to imitate the behavior of their children. As a consequence, students will be encouraged to try healthy food and dishes if they see their friends eating these dishes. Thus, children will adopt a healthy diet. However, parents also have a great effect on children’s eating habits. First of all, it is undeniable that parents are the ones who spend a large amount of time living under the same roof with their children. Therefore, parents will have a deep insight into their offspring’s tastes and preferences. Under the circumstances, parents can offer children custom-tailored meals, in which healthy ingredients can be added while still ensuring it fits the children’s taste. Besides, parents’ eating behaviors will also partly affect children’s behaviors since children look up to their parents and live up to their lifestyles. Hence, if parents are health-conscious, their offspring will learn healthy lifestyles from them. To conclude, although schools play a vital role in enhancing the quality of children’s meals, I strongly believe that the role of parents is more indispensable in encouraging children to have a healthy diet.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
views about a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meal
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
should
be offered
at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
or at home. While
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
assume that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
will be the best option for encouraging
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
to have a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
diet, I
still
believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
are a more significant factor to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
diets.

There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
reasons why
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
play a crucial part in helping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
familiarize themselves with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
diets. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
don’t have any selection of dishes that they eat in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
since they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
eat following the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school’s
menu.
Therefore
, should the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
implement healthier foods during the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meals
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
might be more inclined to
"Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "try to" is recommended for writing.
try and
accept them.
Moreover
, educational officials can capitalize on peer influence to promote
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eating
habits due to the fact that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
tend to imitate the behavior of their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
. As a consequence, students will
be encouraged
to try
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
food and dishes if they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
their friends
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eating
these dishes.
Thus
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
will adopt a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
diet.

However
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
also
have a great effect on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eating
habits.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, it is undeniable that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
are the ones who spend a large amount of time living under the same roof with their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
.
Therefore
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
will have a deep insight into their offspring’s tastes and preferences. Under the circumstances,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
can offer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
custom-tailored
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meals
, in which
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
ingredients can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
while
still
ensuring it fits the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children’s
taste.
Besides
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents’
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eating
behaviors will
also
partly affect
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children’s
behaviors since
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
look up to their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
up to their lifestyles.
Hence
, if
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
are health-conscious, their offspring will learn
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
lifestyles from them.

To conclude
, although
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
play a vital role in enhancing the quality of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meals
, I
strongly
believe that the role of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
is more indispensable in encouraging
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
to have a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
diet.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay People have different views about a healthy meal for children should be offered at school or at home.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 5band
    In this contemporany era, many poople believe that the heaving meat with other family members become advantageous to enhance socialization.
    In this contemporany era, many poople believe that the heaving meat with other family members become advantageous to enhance socialization. Incontrovertibly, I opine that this kind of activitiy has most significant, as it contain myriad bemefits such as, improvement in trust, loyalty and so on. At ...
  • 6.5band
    People are getting used to seeing images of disasters and violence shown on TV news programmers. Why is this? What are the effects of this on individuals and the society?
    Television has an important function in both giving information through the media and offering enjoyment to viewers. Without a doubt, it has a positive impact on an individual's life by conveying broad knowledge and information from all over the world. However, the dangers of disseminating violent c...
  • 5.5band
    Recycling of waste across cities
    Disposal of waste has been a serious problem since past few decades. With rising population all over the globe, there has been a tremendous increase in waste being generated everyday and I agree to some extent that less actions are being taken by the people regarding recycling and goverments across ...
  • 6band
    SHOULD SMOKING BE BANNED IN PUBLIC AREAS?
    From my perspective, smoking should be entirely banned in public areas due to its nasty effects on our modern society. First of all, smoking is extremely harmful to our health since it can reduce life by 9-10 years. Medical research has proven that cigarettes contain about 600 ingredients, many of ...
  • 5band
    Describing information from tables
    The table gives information about students applications and acceptance for UK university courses in the field of tourism, transport and travel between 2000 and 2002. Firstly, we can see that with regard to application decreased during the period. Many more men and women applied for these courses th...
  • 5.5band
    The impacts of stress on health
    As people are living in the developing world, the pace of life is becoming faster and faster. These things put a big strain on a human to work harder and harder so as to meet the demands of society. And by that, the pressure was born and it exists everywhere, in the workplace, school, family, . . . ...