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People are less fit and active nowadays than in the past. What are the reasons for this? What measures can be taken to fix this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience

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The most obvious proof supporting my viewpoint is the decline in the popularity of traditional newspapers. Conventional newspapers’ nature is characterized by a thorough and time-consuming process of editing, printing, and distributing. This turns out to be a weakness that causes newspapers to fail to meet the instant quest for news of modern newsreaders. In addition, due to the fact that printed newspapers are geographically limited, their reach and exposure levels are be becoming substantially lower than those of online news. Apparently, it is online press, not the traditional one, which helps news seekers all over the globe access local news as well as global news published by a variety of internationally prestigious newspapers including BBC, New York Times, and Wall Street Journal. Such availability of online news far outweighs that of printed news, steadily dominating the news industry. Moreover, the advantages of online news significantly surpass those of printed newspaper. In this era of advanced technology and communication, the omnipresence of the Internet and the availability of Internet devices have boosted the popularity of online news to the extent that the concept of buying and reading a printed newspaper would become obsolete and inconvenient. Online platforms which facilitate fast-moving and immediate news updates will certainly become the utmost solution to satisfy increasing demand and busy news seekers. Thanks to Internet-based platforms, news about an incident happening half the world away could be retrieved within a few seconds after its commencement, which renders news updates one day later on conventional newspapers out of date. In conclusion, despite the fact that printed newspapers still hold an important role, I firmly support the tendency that they will be eclipsed by online news.
The most obvious proof supporting my viewpoint is the decline in the popularity of traditional
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newspapers
. Conventional
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newspapers’
nature
is characterized
by a thorough and time-consuming process of editing, printing, and distributing. This turns out to be a weakness that causes
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newspapers
to fail to
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meet
the instant quest for
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news
of modern newsreaders.
In addition
, due to the fact that
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printed
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newspapers
are
geographically
limited, their reach and exposure levels are
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be
becoming
substantially
lower than those of
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online
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news
.
Apparently
, it is
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online
press, not the traditional one, which
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helps
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news
seekers all over the globe access local
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as well
as global
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news
published by a variety of
internationally
prestigious
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newspapers
including BBC,
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New
York Times, and Wall Street Journal. Such availability of
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online
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news
far outweighs that of
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printed
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news
,
steadily
dominating the
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news
industry.

Moreover
, the advantages of
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online
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news
significantly
surpass those of
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printed
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newspaper
. In this era of advanced technology and communication, the omnipresence of the Internet and the availability of Internet devices have boosted the popularity of
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online
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news
to the extent that the concept of buying and reading a
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printed
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newspaper
would become obsolete and inconvenient.
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Online
platforms which facilitate
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fast
-moving and immediate
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news
updates will
certainly
become the utmost solution to satisfy increasing demand and busy
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news
seekers. Thanks to Internet-based platforms,
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news
about an incident happening half the world away could
be retrieved
within a few seconds after its commencement, which renders
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news
updates one day later on conventional
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newspapers
out of date.

In conclusion
, despite the fact that
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printed
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newspapers
still
hold an
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important
role, I
firmly
support the tendency that they will
be eclipsed
by
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online
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news
.
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IELTS essay People are less fit and active nowadays than in the past. What are the reasons for this? What measures can be taken to fix this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience

Essay
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3 paragraphs
280 words
6.0
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