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Some people say that companies who sponsor big games can gain a lot; other people believe that it has disadvantages for them. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some people say that companies who sponsor big games can gain a lot; other people believe that it has disadvantages for them. 8e2m
This is the age of consumerism, where people buy more than they require which is the sheer outcome of mass advertisements of brand products where sponsoring Sport activity have come into Vogue. In such scenario one school of thought endorses such development, while the Sceptics fare give against this essay discusses both Constructing argument and draws logical conclusion In the end. Analysis of latter group reveals that funding Sports activities ultimately increases the cost of products, say for example the soft drinks companies are charging enormously higher than its actual price as they are spending lavishly on sponsorship of sports activities moreover, manyier times they are promoting the products which are health hazardous, owing to Such reasons Sponsorship of brand products should be prohibited. However, although such sponsorships may he deleterious at times, such sponsorship generates brand image for the organizations that eventually hike the sales of products and services the organizations wants to people buy. To cite an example in my country India the famous cricket league "1PL' is totally sponsored by vivo the mobile company which has witnessed increase in the sale of mobile. Another relevent arguments to Support such funding is that there are many outdated sports which have suddenly come into Vogue. say for example kabaddi and badminton Besides this the sports athletes are earning millions, consequently it stimulates the youth to indulge into sports era. on the close scrutiny, I conclude that sponsorship of sports activity has its own positives, hence friendly agree with formal group.
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people
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buy
more than they require which is the sheer outcome of mass advertisements of brand
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products
where sponsoring
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Sport
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activity
have
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come
into Vogue. In such scenario one school of
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thought
endorses such development, while the
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Sceptics
fare give against this essay discusses both Constructing argument and draws logical conclusion In the
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end
.

Analysis of latter group reveals that funding
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Sports
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activities
ultimately
increases the cost of
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products
, say
for example
the soft drinks
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companies
are charging
enormously
higher than its actual price as they are spending
lavishly
on
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sponsorship
of
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sports
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activities
moreover
,
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manyier
times they are promoting the
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products
which are health hazardous, owing to Such reasons
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Sponsorship
of brand
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products
should
be prohibited
.

However
, although such
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sponsorships
may
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he
deleterious at times, such
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sponsorship
generates brand image for the organizations that
eventually
hike the sales of
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products
and services the organizations wants to
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people
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buy
. To cite an example in my country India the
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famous
cricket league
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"
1PL' is
totally
sponsored by
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vivo
the mobile
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company
which has witnessed increase in the sale of mobile.

Another
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relevent
arguments to Support such funding is that there are
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many
outdated
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sports
which have
suddenly
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come
into Vogue.
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say
for example
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kabaddi
and badminton
Besides
this the
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sports
athletes are earning millions,
consequently
it stimulates the youth to indulge into
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sports
era.

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on
the
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close scrutiny
, I conclude that
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sponsorship
of
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sports
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activity
has its
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own
positives,
hence
friendly
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agree
with formal group.
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IELTS essay Some people say that companies who sponsor big games can gain a lot; other people believe that it has disadvantages for them.

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5 paragraphs
251 words
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