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Parents should control children behaviour but some says they shouldnot be controlled. Write both the viewes and give you opinion.

Parents should control children behaviour but some says they shouldnot be controlled. Write both the viewes and give you opinion. oR5pK
Parents should control children behaviour but some says they shouldnot be controlled. Write both the viewes and give you opinion. Parents are always considered as a primary teacher for children when it comes to teaching them moral values. It is often argued that kid's behavior should be controlled by their parents, whilst others disagree and think that they should not manage them. This essay will discuss both points of view and also agrees with the former view. Many support the idea that children should have the freedom to decide by itself and parents should not intervene anyway. This is to say that, it encouraged them to come forward and live their life as an independent and to choose and make their career as per there interests. Despite this, parents must be involved when their children take their life-changing decision. This is because, after all, they have more experience and they know what is better for their children. Turning to the other side of the argument, if parents have authority on their children from their childhood, they come up as more disciplined and well-behaved. As children spent most of the time with their parents and learn what they taught them. A recently published report in Times Now states that kids who live under their parent's guidance are more obedience and have respect towards their elders and full of empathy. In conclusion, I would say if children are not guided properly by their parents they could adopt the wrong path, that is why it is always good if parents have an upper hand on their children and keep them showing the right path.
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children
when it
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to teaching them moral values. It is
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argued that kid's behavior should
be controlled
by their
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parents
, whilst others disagree and
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think
that they should not manage them. This essay will discuss both points of view and
also
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agrees
with the former view.

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support the
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idea
that
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children
should have the freedom to decide by itself and
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parents
should not intervene anyway. This is to say that, it encouraged them to
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come
forward and
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live
their life as an independent and to choose and
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their career as per
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interests. Despite this,
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parents
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must
be involved
when their
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children
take their life-changing decision. This is
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after all
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experience and
they know what is better for their children.

Turning to the other side of the argument, if
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parents
have authority on their
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children
from their childhood, they
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come
up as more disciplined and well-behaved. As
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children
spent most of the time with their
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parents
and learn what they taught them. A recently published report in Times
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Now
states that kids who
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live
under their parent's guidance are more obedience and have respect towards their elders and full of empathy.

In conclusion
, I would say if
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children
are not guided
properly
by their
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parents
they could adopt the
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wrong
path,
that is
why it is always
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good
if
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parents
have an upper hand on their
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children
and
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keep
them showing the right path.
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IELTS essay Parents should control children behaviour but some says they shouldnot be controlled. Write both the viewes and give you opinion.

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  American English
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5.5
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