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owning a jome rather than renting one is very important . why? negative or positive development

owning a jome rather than renting one is very important. why? negative or positive development 6Nral
Being an owner of the house or being a tenant has become a controversy. Owning a house although is an exorbitantly costly exercise for many, a sense of stability is significantly important to people. On the other hand, renting seems to be the easiest way which has less responsibility and less extra expenses. In my opinion, however, I believe that having a home is a positive development. To begin with, one of the lifetime dreams of many is to construct their own house one day as the pride of ownership of a house is an indication of a wealthy person in society. First, they are chased after the dream of fulfillment for which a considerable amount of money is required or apply for a mortgage loan to be supported with the purchase or construction. Secondly, upon construction or purchase, a valuable asset is owned by the person who invested because the said property will be twice as much as the value in the future which enables the owner to convert it for liquid money at the time of an emergency circumstance. On the one hand, since all the citizens of a society cannot afford to build a house, they tend to stay in rented houses even though many problematic issues generally arise between landlords and the tenants such as raising monthly rent by unexpected values, and delayed in getting repairs. Apart from that, some residents have been thoroughly restricted to consume spicy foods in their rooms other than the dining area or spicy cooking is banned in rented houses, especially in Canada. Even though the rentee has no responsibility for maintaining the house and paying property taxes, it is unfortunate to have to spend money and live in a house with a lot of rules and suffer more stress. In conclusion, my personal view is that residents of rent may work harder and reach a considerable saving in a bid to eliminate the stress and live in a hassle-free house even limited parts that might still be worth having their piece of land and living happily with loved ones.
Being an owner of the
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house
or being a tenant has become a controversy.

Owning a
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house
although is an
exorbitantly
costly exercise for
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many
, a sense of stability is
significantly
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important
to
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people
.
On the other hand
, renting seems to be the easiest way which has less responsibility and less extra expenses. In my opinion,
however
, I believe that having a home is a
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positive
development.

To
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begin
with, one of the lifetime dreams of
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many
is to construct their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
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house
one day as the pride of ownership of a
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house
is an indication of a wealthy person in society.
First
, they
are chased
after the dream of fulfillment for which a considerable amount of money
is required
or apply for a mortgage loan to
be supported
with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
or construction.
Secondly
, upon construction or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
, a valuable asset is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
owned
by the person who invested
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because
the said property will be twice as much as the value in the future which enables the owner to convert it for liquid money at the time of an emergency circumstance.

On the one hand, since all the citizens of a society cannot afford to build a
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house
, they tend to stay in rented
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houses
even though
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
problematic issues
generally
arise between landlords and the tenants such as raising monthly rent by unexpected values, and delayed in getting repairs. Apart from that,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
residents have been
thoroughly
restricted to consume spicy foods in their rooms other than the dining area or spicy cooking
is banned
in rented
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houses
,
especially
in Canada.
Even though
the
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rentee
has no responsibility for maintaining the
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house
and paying property taxes, it is unfortunate to
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have to
spend money and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in a
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house
with
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a lot of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and suffer more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
.

In conclusion
, my personal view is that residents of rent may work harder and reach a considerable saving in a bid to eliminate the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in a hassle-free
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
even limited parts that might
still
be worth having their piece of land and living
happily
with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
loved
ones.
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IELTS essay owning a jome rather than renting one is very important. why? negative or positive development

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
349 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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