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One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is Increasing Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages 2 Give teasons for your answer and inchide breathles from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words

One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is Increasing Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages 2 Give teasons for your answer and inchide breathles from your own knowledge or experience M59N
Modern medical facilities and research in the healthcare sector have brought miracles to the world. We have cures for deadly diseases and researchers are working with our genes to prevent diseases even before we are born- marvellous indeed. As a result, people these days live longer. This as an alarming trend according to some while I firmly believe that longer life expectancy offers far many advantages than demerits. Many people opine that increasing life expectancy increases the ratio of the older population and shrink the active workforce. Thus they believe supporting the old generation is a burden for the country. But, this opinion is misguided and not backed by facts. With an increasing life expectancy, people these days remain more active and contribute to society even in their old age. As the government has raised the retirement age, old people are no longer a burden, rather an active workforce. To cite an example, professors, researchers, lawmakers, writers and many other professionals have vast experience and could contribute even more in their old age. Thus, when a physicist discovers a groundbreaking theory in his or her 70s, we should thank the enhanced medical research and treatment. Finally, as the number of working parents is heightening, grandparents are the last hope for young children. Older people are doing us a favour by taking most of our family burdens. Besides, people who we consider no longer useful to the society due to their age, have gifted us the world we live in today with their hard work, tax money and love. To conclude, thanks to the enhanced medical facilities due to which we now live longer and be part of the progress. This enhanced life expectancy is a blessing for the human race. Modern medical facilities and research in the healthcare sector have brought miracles to the world. We have cures for deadly diseases and researchers are working with our genes to prevent diseases even before we are born- marvellous indeed. As a result, people these days live longer. This as an alarming trend according to some while I firmly believe that longer life expectancy offers far many advantages than demerits. Many people opine that increasing life expectancy increases the ratio of the older population and shrink the active workforce. Thus they believe supporting the old generation is a burden for the country. But, this opinion is misguided and not backed by facts. With an increasing life expectancy, people these days remain more active and contribute to society even in their old age. As the government has raised the retirement age, old people are no longer a burden, rather an active workforce. To cite an example, professors, researchers, lawmakers, writers and many other professionals have vast experience and could contribute even more in their old age. Thus, when a physicist discovers a groundbreaking theory in his or her 70s, we should thank the enhanced medical research and treatment. Finally, as the number of working parents is heightening, grandparents are the last hope for young children. Older people are doing us a favour by taking most of our family burdens. Besides, people who we consider no longer useful to the society due to their age, have gifted us the world we live in today with their hard work, tax money and love. To conclude, thanks to the enhanced medical facilities due to which we now live longer and be part of the progress. This enhanced life expectancy is a blessing for the human race.
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medical
facilities and
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research
in the healthcare sector have brought miracles to the
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world
. We have cures for deadly
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diseases
and
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researchers
are
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working
with our genes to
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prevent
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before
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live
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longer
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expectancy increases the ratio of the
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population and shrink the
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active
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workforce
.
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generation is a
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for the country.
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increasing
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people
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old
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government
has raised the retirement
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old
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people
are no
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longer
a
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burden
,
rather
an
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active
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workforce
. To cite an example, professors,
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researchers
, lawmakers, writers and
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many
other professionals have vast experience and could
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contribute
even more in their
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old
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age
.
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Thus
, when a physicist discovers a groundbreaking theory in
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his or her
70s, we should
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thank
the
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enhanced
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medical
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research
and treatment.

Finally
, as the number of
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working
parents is heightening, grandparents are the last hope for young children.
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Older
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people
are doing us a
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favour
by taking most of our family
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burdens
.
Besides
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people
who we consider no
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longer
useful to the
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society
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due
to their
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age
, have gifted us the
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world
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live
in
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today
with their
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hard
work, tax money and
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love
.

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thanks
to the
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enhanced
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medical
facilities
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due
to which we
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now
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live
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longer
and be part of the progress. This
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enhanced
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life
expectancy is a blessing for the human race. Modern
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medical
facilities and
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research
in the healthcare sector have brought miracles to the
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world
. We have cures for deadly
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diseases
and
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researchers
are
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working
with our genes to
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prevent
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diseases
even
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before
we
are born
-
Possible spelling mistake. 'marvellous' is British English.
marvellous
indeed
.
As a result
,
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people
these days
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live
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longer
. This as an alarming trend according to
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some
while I
firmly
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believe
that
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longer
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life
expectancy offers far
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many
advantages than demerits.

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Many
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people
opine that
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increasing
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life
expectancy increases the ratio of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
older
population and shrink the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
active
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
workforce
.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Thus
they
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believe
supporting the
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old
generation is a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
burden
for the country.
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But
, this opinion
is misguided
and not backed by facts. With an
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increasing
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life
expectancy,
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people
these days remain more
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active
and
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contribute
to
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society
even in their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
old
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
. As the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
has raised the retirement
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
old
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are no
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longer
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
burden
,
rather
an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
active
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
workforce
. To cite an example, professors,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
researchers
, lawmakers, writers and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
other professionals have vast experience and could
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
contribute
even more in their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
old
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Thus
, when a physicist discovers a groundbreaking theory in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
his or her
70s, we should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
thank
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
enhanced
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
and treatment.

Finally
, as the number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
parents is heightening, grandparents are the last hope for young children.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Older
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are doing us a
Possible spelling mistake. 'favour' is British English.
favour
by taking most of our family
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
burdens
.
Besides
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who we consider no
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
longer
useful to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
society
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due
to their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
, have gifted us the
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world
we
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
live
in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
with their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
work, tax money and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
.

To conclude
,
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thanks
to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
enhanced
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medical
facilities
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
due
to which we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
live
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
longer
and be part of the progress. This
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enhanced
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
expectancy is a blessing for the human race.
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IELTS essay One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is Increasing Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages 2 Give teasons for your answer and inchide breathles from your own knowledge or experience

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580 words
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