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Older people often say that their life was better in the past than it is now. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Older people often say that their life was better in the past than it is now. JleAw
Grey generation often compared their present life with the yesteryears and observed that nowadays, their life is more miserable than before. I stand with elder people as now they are used by families for their growth and many times beloved ones ignore them that will be discussed in the following paragraphs. To start with, it is true that for children, grey people are just caretakers for their grandchildren. To be more precise, in todays' materialistic world, both parents are working and they do not have enough time for their young ones. That is why, they give responsibility to their parents to take care for them and when their children indulge in some wrong activities, they blame their parents and start treating them as strangers and send them to old age homes which was never observed in the past years. From the recent survey, it is observed that about 30% elders are living far away from their loved ones and suffering from family's love and affection. Therefore, no one can deny the fact that in present era, elder people are suffering more. To fortify further, in past time, every decision for the betterment of the family was taken by elders which showed that their family gave them respect. However, in present scenario, when old members of the family try to say something for their beloved ones' well-being, their children and grandchildren do not want listen to them and but even insult them. This is very hurtful situation for elders which sometimes lead to many mental disorders. For example, in developed countries, majority of old age people ignored by their families and they are the victims of depression. Hence, it is crystal clear that grey generation life was better in the past as compared to present scenario. In conclusion, I reckon that grey people are just like shade of the trees who need respect, love and care as like they got 20-30 years back otherwise, they will be burden for themselves.
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compared their
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life with the
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yesteryears
and observed that nowadays, their life is more miserable than
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. I stand with
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elder
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they are
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families
for their growth and
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times beloved
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ones
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ignore
them that will
be discussed
in the following paragraphs.

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with, it is true that for children,
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grey
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people
are
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caretakers for their grandchildren. To be more precise, in
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todays
' materialistic world, both parents are
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working and
they do not have
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enough
time for their young
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ones
.
That is
why, they give responsibility to their parents to take care for them and when their children indulge in
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some
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wrong
activities, they blame their parents and
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treating them as strangers and
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send
them to
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age homes which was never observed in the past years. From the recent survey, it
is observed
that about 30%
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elders
are living far away from their
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loved
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ones
and suffering from family's
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love
and affection.
Therefore
, no one can deny the fact that in
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present
era,
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elder
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people
are suffering more.

To fortify
further
, in
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past time
, every decision for the betterment of the
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family
was taken
by
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elders
which
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showed
that their
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family
gave them respect.
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, in
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present
scenario, when
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old
members of the
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family
try to say something for their beloved ones' well-being, their children and grandchildren do not want listen to them and
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but
even insult them. This is
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hurtful situation for
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elders
which
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lead to
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many
mental disorders.
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developed countries
,
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majority of
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old
age
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people
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ignored
by their
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families and
they are the victims of depression.
Hence
, it is crystal
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clear
that
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grey
generation life was better in the past as compared to
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present
scenario.

In conclusion
, I reckon that
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grey
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people
are
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just
like shade of the trees who need respect,
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love
and care as like they
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got
20-30 years back
otherwise
, they will be burden for themselves.
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IELTS essay Older people often say that their life was better in the past than it is now.

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